The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a fascinating story. It's timing coincides quite nicely with the election.

For me personally, the ellipses were a distraction. Like many experts suggest, I believe ellipses, em dashes and exclamation points should be used sparingly. Using them often takes away the impact that they are meant to have. Plus you do such a great job of picking just the right verbs, that you don't need the punctuation to do your pausing or exclaiming.

I liked how the ending brought the story full circle. You did a nice job of building the content and describing the scenes as they unfolded. Good job.
11/19/12
Some great ideas and characterising, but it needs some spacing to bring out the clarity of your message.