The Official Writing Challenge
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This is an interesting story. I wanted to reach through the screen and shake the mom. Many parents will buy skimpy clothes for their kids than lament about it being toot revealing. I'm glad the MC heard God's message in time before something horrific happened to her. Good job.
11/08/12
Your title covers the story much better than the clothes you describe cover your MC, but it's well told. It may have been a little stronger to step into her thoughts rather than to summarise them, but this is a minor issue.
You kept me reading from beginning to end and that reveals I found it interesting, although it ended feeling... unfinished?

However that I consider a personal preference and another may be rapt in its fulness. I'm sure this story will have many readers.
11/10/12
I like how this story progresses...God bless and thanks for sharing it...