The Official Writing Challenge
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10/25/12
This was powerful and emotionally charged on many levels. Great entry. Thank you.

God bless~
10/26/12
Very well-written story with an inspiring ending! Your descriptions of the events from the MC's point of view were excellent. Blessings on your writing!
10/26/12
Very moving and well-written. It was easy to identify with the MC. I enjoyed reading this. Thanks.
10/29/12
An intense but beautiful story. You did a great job.

God Bless!
10/30/12
This was a great read. you did a nice job of building the suspense. I had a near death experience and one of the first things the body does is restrict blood flow to the limbs so that every bit of oxygen can get to the vital organs. It is an unbearable pain--much like I would suspect burning alive would feel. I liked how you described the sensations the MC was feeling as he slowly recovered. I also thought bringing the story full circle back to the cup was an excellent use of the topic. Nicely done.
11/03/12
Congratulations for ranking 11th in level four and 12 overall!