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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Blessed (10/11/12)

TITLE: Drenched
By Benjamin Graber
10/13/12


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I hurl rocks at the sky,
Trying to punch a hole in the gray blanket
Canopied across the atmosphere.
But in spite of every colorful insult,
I cannot find a way to summon
A single drop of liquid gold
Into my greedy fingers.

My dreams stall,
Empty of the fuel
Iíve been seeking.
No amount of abuse
Can coerce them to move
A single inch further
Toward my fantasies.
I have nothing left but to wait,
And scream,
And hurl more rocks
At the sky.

The raindrops begin to fall,
Dripping into my misery.
The steady
Splish,
Splash,
Splosh,
Reminds me of everything
I do not have.

I moan at my fate
As the flowers lap up the droplets
And blossom.

Here I stand,
On a fertile planet
In an arid universe.
The earth my not spin
To the beat
Of my desires,
But still the blessings fall
With a steady
Splish,
Splash,
Splosh,
Drenching
My thirsty soul.


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Jody Day 10/18/12
Very compelling and nicely done! Good job writing to theme.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 10/19/12
This is beautiful. I'm not always a big poetry fan as I feel it often goes over my head but this piece spoke volumes to me. I still have chills running down my spine and the only word that even begins to do this piece justice is Wow!
Genia Gilbert10/19/12
I enjoyed this, and especially loved the way your title sort of crowns it all. Good job!
Verna Cole Mitchell 10/19/12
Lovely, lovely poem
Danielle King 10/20/12
I love this short poem. It speaks volumes in few words. Love the title too. Excellent!
Noel Mitaxa 10/21/12
A creative invitation to relax and let God's refreshing come within the urgency and patience of his timing - without any need for any advice from us.
Janice Wappel10/21/12
Short, sweet, full of great messages. Well done. Thanks for sharing your talent for poetry.