The Official Writing Challenge
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Good writing! What a challenge it is to make kid's lunches enjoyable. And I appreciate the point you made about wanting whatever is forbidden. This is true for other things as well as food. Temptations are all around us and it takes real strength of character to avoid them all. Great lesson!
09/10/12
I liked the attitude of sensible moderation in this story. I also appreciated the creative healthy snack suggestions! This was a good story! :)
I enjoyed this interesting conversation between the two friends. I winced at the I don't get to stay home like you line. You'd think people would know better. :) I also thought it was great how you showed human nature wants what is forbidden. It's so true and God gave us Jesus to help us understand and forgive those times of giving into temptation,. Nice job.
Congratulations for ranking 18 overall!
09/18/12
Oh the irony! :) Caitlyn's wisdom and creativity with snacks was great. I enjoyed your story.