The Official Writing Challenge
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08/31/12
Cute story...with a light hearted yet good message at the conclusion.

Thanks. God bless~
I had to laugh because I think so many of us have made similar mistakes. One of the things that just popped from your story is how teens know more than anyone in the world! That is until they mature and learn the definition of wisdom! This was a fun read and took me back to my childhood where one Easter instead of a chocolate bunny, we each had a can of sweetened condensed milk! Oh it was yummy!
09/02/12
Great true to life story. I saw one mistake a good proof reader would have caught.

Janie calling was out to her.
which should read
Janie was calling out to her.

Keep writing for the Lord!
Congratulations for ranking 6th in level three and 17 overall!