The Official Writing Challenge
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08/16/12
Awww...So touching. It brought tears to my eyes. You've managed to bring a sad situation to life with dignity, while covering the topic.

I've seen so many "59B" patients during my days of working at a Nursing Facility. Thank you for writing this poignant piece.

God Bless~
08/18/12
This is quite touching and well written. It concerns a heartbreaking thing that seems to touch all of us more and more, but you have given it a sweet perspective.
08/19/12
This is beautiful. It's very moving and very well written with lovely rhythm and rhyme. Defintely one of the best!
08/19/12
Lovely,sentimental,exemplifying the power of music to evoke memory.
08/21/12
You did a wonderful job of placing the reader in the wheelchair with the MC. I could feel his longer for a different time and his frustration with where life is now ... I could even feel the frustration with not knowning his own name (or the names of his children).

And yet, his heart filled his memory with his wife. So moving and touching. A truly enjoyable read!
This is lovely. the rhymes and rhythm just sing to my soul--a sad song but one with a touch of hope. The ending was a surprise and made the poem even more special.
08/22/12
This brought tears to my eyes since my own mom is in a care facility. Delightful and moving. Well written! God bless!
Congratulations for ranking 8th in level 3 and 16 overall!
08/29/12
This was wonderful! You tell the story so well through poetry! What a gift! Blessings, Ruth Brown