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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Savory to the Taste (07/26/12)

TITLE: Two Four-Letter Words
By Noel Mitaxa
08/02/12


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Mike and Todd had booked a table at Steve’s Steak Stable for another “Man Food” night; and as proud, unofficial card-carrying members of “Vegetable Liberation,” their menu choices focused on meat - but only from vegetarian cows, pigs, deer or sheep!

They smiled their thanks as the waiter set down their meals; a couple of sides to share with two gigantic T-bones still fizzing on the iron plates cradled on thick wooden trays to absorb the heat. This was going to be some demolition derby, because for these two best friends, a meal couldn’t just be a meal. It had to be a contest, for the respect in their friendship allowed plenty of room for rivalry; right from their first day at school.

Busy family life and demanding work schedules made these friends value their “Man Food” nights, as they proved the truth of Proverbs 27:17 - “as iron sharpens iron, so one man sharpens another.”

Food intake replaced conversation, until Todd rested his fork. “How did Saturday’s men’s breakfast go? I’d booked the weekend away with Stacey and the kids before I knew about it.”

“It was a great time, and Pastor Kelvin shared some new ideas about how we can be the salt of the earth, like Jesus said,” Mike replied.

“New ideas?” Todd furrowed his brow. “I’ve only ever heard about salt predating refrigeration as a preservative; before preachers serve up guilt trips about how we need to preserve everyone’s morals.

Mike produced a paper napkin from his pocket. “Well check out what I wrote down!

“Salt enhances taste, just like we put on these steaks. So God’s grace can flow through us to help people see how much better their lives can be.”

“Let’s not try it on desserts,” Todd grinned, “and if you drink salty water you could end up with “brine” damage – Hah! But what else did he say?”

“Funny you should mention salty water,” Mike chuckled, “because salty water is harder to boil or freeze. It’s more thermostatic, so God’s grace helps us to keep people around us less emotional and more objective if there’s tension in the air.”

“But salt is destructive too,” Todd countered. “What about salt for de-icing winter roads? It clears the roads, but it eats our cars up!”

“That’s true,” Mike replied, “but that’s just like God’s grace corrodes the hard attitudes that we discover in some people from time to time.”

Todd leaned forward with a smile. “But even a teaspoon full of salt can kill! “

“You’re right again, Todd,” Mike conceded, “but let’s not let our steaks get cold. These notes can wait.”

Eating resumed, heartily, as the two friends worked their way through their protein and trimmings.

Todd eventually pushed his empty plate away with a satisfied grin. “I always know when I’ve eaten enough; it’s when my chair hasn’t shifted and I feel the table rubbing against my shirt. But I’d like to hear more about that breakfast.”

“Thought you’d never ask,” chuckled Mike. “You mentioned how salt can kill if you ingest too much, but I’ve got here ‘salt kills infection,’ so we can release God’s grace into poisonous attitudes and abusive scenarios to promote healing and harmony.

“Did you realise that salty water is a more powerful conductor for electricity than ordinary water?” Mike asked. “Pastor Kelvin invited us to pray by concentrating less on our problems and more on God’s grace, so we can respond to his working with more confidence and less surprise. How about that?

“But salt’s greatest feature is that it makes people thirsty. Which means that as we allow God to direct his grace through us, we will connect with people’s inner needs or hopes, or even with the hurts they’ve hidden away from everyone else. And as they sense his availability through how we interact with them, they will want to know more about how to plug into his grace for themselves.”

“So Psalm 34 verse 8 is right on the mark,” Todd nodded: “Taste and see that the Lord is good. Happy is the man who takes refuge in him.”

“You betcha,” Mike replied, “because S-A-L-T is just another way to spell L-O-V-E!”


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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 08/02/12
This is a cute take on the topic. Though most people may tend to think savory means delicious, it technically is about the salt and herb tastes in the foods. By using the verses the way you did you really nailed the topic while at the same time interpreting an important scripture.

My only suggestion would be instead of using taglines like he chuckled (Many professionals discourage that because you can't chuckle and talk simultaneously) nut use these spots as a narrative description that lets the reader see the expressions of the character as well as know who is speaking. An excellent example was when your MC furrowed his brow. Immediately, I get a mental picture and understood that the MC was a tad puzzled.

You did a nice job of setting up the story. I'll admit I was a tad slow on some of your jokes (the vegetarian animals) but once it sunk in, I chuckled out loud. I always appreciate a good sense of humor early in the day to help me start out on a happy foot. Nice job.
Linda Goergen08/02/12
I really enjoyed this, you nailed the topic both in their actions and their conversation. While it was a lighthearted read, envisioning two buddies having a fun and “savory” dinner together, the conversation held some serious and informative scriptural truths. Wonderful job on this.
CD Swanson 08/02/12
I enjoyed this interesing and well written piece. Nicely done, and an entirely delightful read.

God Bless~
Danielle King 08/03/12
This is written in a light hearted, easy to read and digest style, and the message is delivered in a non-preachy, subtle way without losing impact.

A clever take on the topic too. It gave me food for thought!

I love the catchy title and the ending.Great job!
Laura Manley08/07/12
This was a well-written entry that I felt flowed quite nicely. The informative way you brought this topic alive was unique. Just to let you know about "throwing a brick," there is a forum called "How to Throw a Brick" which until I read it, I had the same problem as you. It really is quite easy. If I may be of further help to you in that regard, just PM me and I'll give you the info to get you where you want to be next "brick throwing" time. Again, I very much enjoyed your entry.
Laura Manley08/07/12
This was a well-written entry that I felt flowed quite nicely. The informative way you brought this topic alive was unique. Just to let you know about "throwing a brick," there is a forum called "How to Throw a Brick" which until I read it, I had the same problem as you. It really is quite easy. If I may be of further help to you in that regard, just PM me and I'll give you the info to get you where you want to be next "brick throwing" time. Again, I very much enjoyed your entry.
Laura Manley08/07/12
This was a well-written entry that I felt flowed quite nicely. The informative way you brought this topic alive was unique. Just to let you know about "throwing a brick," there is a forum called "How to Throw a Brick" which until I read it, I had the same problem as you. It really is quite easy. If I may be of further help to you in that regard, just PM me and I'll give you the info to get you where you want to be next "brick throwing" time. Again, I very much enjoyed your entry.
Laura Manley08/07/12
Sorry 'bout that; but it is after 1:00 a.m. and I guess I got trigger happy!
Ellen Carr 08/07/12
A most enjoyable and humorous read yet with many good messages based on salt. Trust a man to have a paper napkin from an earlier meal still in his pocket!
Loren T. Lowery08/07/12
I really like the way you are able to bring everyday items and situations and bring them back to "prove" the Written Word. It points out how God is all around us, all the time and all we need do is look out and with humbled thoughts - see.
Verna Cole Mitchell 08/07/12
You have great analogies here in this very interesting story.
Edmond Ng 08/09/12
A theological discussion over a table of food! This is a well written piece suitable for apologetics with much to digest within the story.
CD Swanson 08/09/12
CONGRATS!!!!

Another win and counting!

God bless~
Hiram Claudio08/09/12
Congrats my friend on a well deserved 3rd place ribbon!
Leola Ogle 08/09/12
Congrats my friend! Good job Noel! :)
Danielle King 08/09/12
YAY! Good on yer mate. Congratulations!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 08/09/12
Congratulations for ranking 3rd in your level and 15 overall! HAPPY DANCE!
Ellen Carr 08/09/12
Congratulations on your 3rd place Noel. Well done!