The Official Writing Challenge
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You told quite a story with this profound piece of poetry. It is easy to fight over silly things and let them get the better of us.

At times I struggled to follow the lines but I think that's mainly because I often struggle with poetry.

You offered some wise council in these lines. Nice job.
That was some amazing work. You've managed to write a poem that was not only in depth and on topic, but memorable. Thanks.

God Bless~
A nicely crafted poem that opens eyes to the struggles of the needy and the fact that God does not see as man does. Well done!
Great depiction of emotions and confusion that keeps rolling through some appetising sounds and smells as you build towards a
warm conclusion.
Oh, I like this piece! Very creative. Great job Janice!!!!