The Official Writing Challenge
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You told quite a story with this profound piece of poetry. It is easy to fight over silly things and let them get the better of us.

At times I struggled to follow the lines but I think that's mainly because I often struggle with poetry.

You offered some wise council in these lines. Nice job.
08/02/12
That was some amazing work. You've managed to write a poem that was not only in depth and on topic, but memorable. Thanks.

God Bless~
08/09/12
A nicely crafted poem that opens eyes to the struggles of the needy and the fact that God does not see as man does. Well done!
08/09/12
Great depiction of emotions and confusion that keeps rolling through some appetising sounds and smells as you build towards a
warm conclusion.
Oh, I like this piece! Very creative. Great job Janice!!!!