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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Fragrance (10/24/05)

TITLE: The Anniversary Gift
By Maxx .
10/30/05


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It'd been a trying day at the office. My eyes burned as if each capillary throbbed in its own distinct rhythm.

A voice startled me. "Jesse?" Sandy smiled, her teeth gleamed behind ruby lips. "You told me to throw you outta here on time tonight. Trying to get me in trouble?"

"What time is it?" My brain was rattled.

She peeked at her watch. "4:11."

Had I even taken a lunch break? I ran my hand across my face and groaned. "Thanks, you're a doll."

I stood and walked around the desk. My legs were stiff from a day of sitting and I bumped against a stack of folders. They scattered about the carpet in a confused mess.

My temples throbbed as I realized the extent of the chaos. I knelt and began to straighten the pages. Sandy removed her heels and squatted opposite me. I glanced at her. The skirt she wore, short even by college intern standards, had ridden far up her legs. Her thighs were firm and athletic, smooth and tanned.

I tried to turn away but my flesh was weak.

She seemed not to notice my inadvertent fascination.

My spirit screamed at me to run. My body refused. I edged closer. A fragrant cloud of lilacs and vanilla wafted about her. It was a narcotic to me. My pulse strengthened as my neck began to bead with sweat. I slipped into the temptation, the danger excited me.

Sandy remained busy. "You'll be late. Go!" Her eyes met mine and she smiled.

I retrieved my coat and was halfway out the door. The reason that I needed to leave on time sprang into my mind. "Oh, that's great. Today's my anniversary."

She stared and blinked.

"I worked right through lunch," I said. "I forgot to go buy my wife a gift."

"Whatcha going to do?"

"I guess just run to Wal-Mart and grab... whatever." I calculated the damage if I showed up empty handed.

Sandy stood. "Wait. If you buy ’whatever’ you'll either end up with a vacuum cleaner or a negligee." The choices seemed logical to me, but she rolled her eyes. "You goof! You don't want to buy a lame gift."

I shrugged. "So what do you suggest?"

Her mouth lifted into a captivating smile and she skittered barefoot across the carpet. "Does she wear perfume?"

"Yea," I paused and rubbed my forehead. I couldn't remember if my wife had worn perfume since our baby had been born over a year prior. I struggled to isolate a memory. Nothing came.

Sandy moved close in front of me, her body near. "Do you like my fragrance?"

My mouth went dry as her temptation rose again. A red cloud rolled across my vision. I wanted to pray but no words came.

"Can you smell it?" Her eyes were the lightest shade of blue I'd ever seen. They were large and round. They looked at me. "Maybe it's warn off. Sniff my neck." She placed her hand on the back of my head and lowered me toward her. "I won't bite."

My hands went to her hips as my face descended to her ear. Her nails, polished and smooth, moved in small circles along the nape of my neck. She inched tighter to me as I inhaled her fragrance in a slow, deep draught. It swelled inside of me like an enchanting spell and I closed my eyes and wallowed in the sensation.

My breath, hot against her flesh, caused her body to shudder between my hands. She stepped away, her smile a bit richer. "Whatcha think? You like it?"

"Uh, yea, sure," I stammered. "Nice." I felt dirty.

She bounced on her toes. "I knew you would!" She bounded out of my office and returned with a golden box. "It's called L'Extrait de Vanille et Lilas de Fleur. It's French! I have a brand new bottle. Here!" Her eyes brimmed with sincerity. "It's from Macy's."

I wasn't sure. I wrestled with the basic concept of giving another woman's perfume to my wife. It seemed unclean at the core. "I don't know..." A tremor in my gut spoke of boundaries exceeded.

"You don't have time to argue." She placed the box in my hand.

"Okay." I thought of trying to hold my wife once she was scented with the fragrance. Would I see Sandy's blue eyes looking at me? I went to the elevator. "Father God, I'm sorry. What am I supposed to do now?"


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Sally Hanan10/31/05
Wow, so real it's scary.
terri tiffany11/02/05
I loved this! I don't know if I wanted to smack him or her:) But you did make it so realistic..you brought out many thoughts about all the three relationships so well. Well written.
Jan Ackerson 11/02/05
Painfully written--and that's a good thing. Glad you ended it the way you did...leave the reader contemplating his dilemma. Bravo!
Linda Watson Owen11/04/05
Very real situation written with by a master's hand!
Brandi Roberts11/04/05
Nevermind smacking those two! Smack Maxx for writing so well! This one got me all mad! LOL Men...! Women...! LOL Well done, Maxx.
Donna J. Shepherd11/04/05
Realistic situation and description. Very good.
Julianne Jones11/04/05
Someone should tell Sandy the effect she has on men! LOL. At least he walked away but for how long? Well done.
Debbie OConnor11/05/05
Wow! By far, one of the best stories I've read this week.

I loved this line: "My eyes burned as if each capillary throbbed in its own distinct rhythm." So descriptive I could feel it!

The temptation was real, the description was amazing and the dilemma was terrific. Go Maxx!
Shari Armstrong 11/05/05
Go to Walmart and get her chocolate :) Very well written.
janet rubin11/07/05
This is a story every woman should read. Great job writing it!
Deborah Porter 11/07/05
Maxx, just stopping in very quickly to let you know that, as always, you were up there in the high places. You ranked 20th overall this week (out of 145 entries). Love, Deb
Jessica Schmit05/30/06
Love it, love it, love it. Way too realistic! LOL. Seriously, as one married person to another, this is so "on par" it makes me sick. Incredibly realistic. I also loved how when we (our culture) use the word "fragrance" we also refer to who we are, our actions, reactions, choices etc...It was almost like the man's choice to lower his guard was going to "rub off" at home. And to top it all off-it was his anniversary gift! Splendid. Love it (did I say that already.) Also, I loved how you wrote a story based on what Christian married men and woman do every day (check out hot guys/girls LOL) without giving it a second thought. This brings the seriousness of this prevalent issue to home. I also loved how the scent was really lustful and that he was carrying that scent home with him and passing it to his wife. That's what happens. When one spouse allows lust to intoxicate him/her, they bring it into the home. Excellent piece. So much depth and applicable lessons can be taken from this. Loved the ending. Been there, said that


   
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