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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: In The Kitchen - deadline 7-19-12 @ 9:59 AM NY Time (07/12/12)

TITLE: In Da Kitchen with Marcia Mae
By Tim Pickl
07/14/12


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Characters:
BOB – Crabby man
MARCIA – Bob’s curious, sweet and innocent wife
MURRAY – Bob and Marcia’s mutual friend

Summary:
Murray is video-recording Marcia for the first episode for her new online show, ‘In Da Kitchen with Marcia Mae’, and they are interrupted by Bob.


(Murray is video-recording Marcia in the kitchen as Marcia explains her recipe. Bob walks in from stage right.)

MARCIA
That’s it, folks! After you stir all the ingredients together, you pour about 2/3 of a cup onto the griddle you sprayed the ‘Pam’ on. When you see the pancakes bubble, den you flip dem over for about 30 seconds. Deez homemade pancakes are soooo good.

BOB
Whaddya mean, deez pancakes are sooo good?!? What’s goin’ on here?

MURRAY
Hey there Bob! (points the camera at Bob)

MARCIA
Ohhhh, Bob, we was just makin’ a video—

BOB
A video!?!? Don’t point dat ting at me. Turn it off!

MURRAY
But Bob—

BOB
I said, Turn it off!

MURRAY
Aye-aye, captain.

BOB
Funny man. So, Marcia, please ‘splain to me what’s goin’ on here. A man with a video camera ting filmin’ my wife, in my house in my kitchen.

MARCIA
Ohhhh, Bob, we was just recordin’ the first episode of my new T.V. show!

BOB
(mocks Marcia) The first episode of my new T.V. show—What? Whaddya mean T.V. show?!? You mean like one doze goofy cookie shows on T.V. like Martha Ray?

MURRAY
It’s Rachel Ray, Bob.

BOB
You stay outta dis, Murray.

MARCIA
Yes, Bob, it’s somethin’ like that; only people will see my show on YouTube for free online.

MURRAY
Yes-siree, Bob, it’s free.

BOB
(scowls at Murray) Murray—

MARCIA
Now Bob, settle down. You know weez are all friends here. Murray offered to help me get my show goin’.

BOB
Oh, that’s right… he’s got one-a dem fancy shmancy new HD tings.

MURRAY
(looking at the side of the camera) It’s called an ‘HD Digital Video Camcorder.’

BOB
Dat’s it. It don’t have any tapes.

MURRAY
No siree, Bob, it’s all digital.

MARCIA
Murray, tell Bob about the first recipe video we posted before we decided to give the show a name.

BOB
Oh, oh, now what?

MURRAY
It’s harmless, there big Bob. Earlier today we recorded and posted a video of Marcia as she showed us her secret family Macaroni and Cheese recipe.

MARCIA
Yes Bob, it was sooo great. Da video went viral.

BOB
Went who-all? Are you feelin’ sick?

MURRAY
No, no, no, Bobbie. Viral just means suddenly thousands of people are viewing the video, from all around the world.

BOB
Wow! Dat’s e-mazin’. So what’s da name of your new show? I am not Marcia Ray? (laughs at his own joke)

MARCIA
No, it’s called In Da Kitchen with Marcia Mae.

BOB
Hey, dat kinda has a ring to it. In da kitchen wit Marcia Mae.

MARCIA
I said ‘with”.

BOB
Dat’s what I said, ‘wit’.

MURRAY
Okay, Marcia! I got the video ready, and it’s uploading now.

BOB
Uploafin’?!? Dat sounds right up your alley dare, Murray! (laughs at his own joke)

MURRAY
It’s done, and in the first 10 seconds, it already has 5 hits.

BOB
What’s a hit?

MURRAY
Hits are just the numbers of people viewing the video.

BOB
Can I see da whole ting?

MURRAY
Sure. Let me connect it to your new flat screen T.V.

MARCIA
I will turn it on. (Marcia appears on the screen)

BOB
Oh wait, I have it on mute. Dare ya go.

MURRAY (ANNOUNCER)
Welcome everyone to the first episode of In Da Kitchen with Marcia Mae! (canned applause in the background) Today Marcia will reveal to us her secret family homemade pancake recipe.

BOB
Stop the tape! Who is dat guy talkin’? He sounds like one a doze user car salesmen you see on T.V.

MARCIA
It’s Murray, Bob.

BOB
Dat figures.

MURRAY
Keep watchin’.

MARCIA (on screen)
Hi everyone. Isn’t this a wonderful day? It’s wonderful because He—Jesus—is Wonderful. Today on the first episode of In Da Kitchen with Marcia Mae I am gonna show you how to make your own pancakes from scratch. Doze boxed pancakes taste okay, but dare’s nothin’ like a stack of homemade cakes with real butter and real maple syrup.

MURRAY
I’m going to pause it right there. Guess what?

BOB
Oh, oh. Now what?!?!

MURRAY
In the past 10 minutes or so, this video now has over 1,000 hits. It’s goin’ viral, too!

MARCIA
Thank God.

BOB
Yeah, amen.


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Camille (C D) Swanson 07/19/12
Interesting and clever use of the topic. I liked the different style of presenting, and the realistic dialogue with the MC's. Thanks. God bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 07/19/12
This was a fun and innovative way to deal with the topic. I had some delightful giggles while reading this. Good job.
Hiram Claudio07/20/12
This was fun ... and the idea of a scripted play for the entry was very creative. I thought it flowed well and kept the reader's interest. I particularly liked the various exchanges between the three MC's and thought Bob's character was well developed.

Maybe it's me but ... I thought the line about "Jesus" when Marcia opened her shows was a bit forced and not sure how it helped the story (or if this were in real life how it would have helped her show - other than being a statement of her faith I guess). It just struck me as an odd place for a mention of faith.

Overall, I enjoyed this well constructed piece.
Ellen Carr 07/21/12
A humorous and inovative take on the topic. I too thought the bit about Jesus didn't quite fit in. But overall, a fun read.
Genia Gilbert07/22/12
A different approach and clever. It seems like a lot of thought went into it, and was on topic.
Leola Ogle 07/23/12
Fun and delightful read. Enjoyed the dialogue. Well written. God bless!