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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: PICNIC - deadline 7-12-12 @ 9:59 AM NY Time (07/05/12)

TITLE: A princess story
By Raymond Dickerson


She puts her faith together like
A giant picture puzzle, placing
Pieces where she needs them so
They fit within the muddle of
Her ala-carte approach to what
She feels she must believe so she
Can make it through her day and
She can live a life of ease.

Like a princess at a picnic who can
Have the things she wants, without her
Ever compromising, sympathizing
With the have-nots; only
Dining on the good stuff,
Only blessings and desserts;
Leaving sacrifice and fasting to
Those silly knaves and serfs

Who think that faith is taking Jesus at
His deed and at His word;
They’ve never pleaded for prosperity
Or money, how absurd!
You see some slick dressed T.V. preacher
Told her she could feel entitled if she
Sent him fifty dollars during
His latest revival.

She could live a life abundant
Have her cake and eat it too,
She simply turned the dial and found a style
That fit her point of view; she could
Keep the picnic nature of her
Cut and paste religion,
Never looking for the real truth,
Rather one that she could fit in.

She traded in a real crown for
A counterfeit tiara;
Swapped her priceless inner-beauty for
Some cheap dime-store mascara.
No one told the princess that
You must believe it all
Or you may end up dancing solo,
You may even miss the ball.

You must take the Holy Scripture and
Embrace it word for word,
You can’t repaint black and white with gray,
Decide which lines to blur.
You must take your bitter pill,
You must shoulder your own cross;
You must lose your life to gain it or
Remain among the lost.

A blessing gained is not the point;
Easy life is not the goal.
Thinking only of yourself and no one else
Will not win souls.
A princess may well reign within
A children’s bedtime story;
She must abdicate her throne if
She’s to share in Jesus’ Glory

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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 07/12/12
Wow! I'm not a big poetry person often feeling I'm missing something but this piece spoke volumes to me. I had chills and felt goosebumps popping out. The line -- She could Keep the picnic nature of her
Cut and paste religion, is so powerful and really makes the poem on-topic. Not because you used the word picnic but for what that word stands for universally. Very creative!
C D Swanson 07/13/12
Beautiful! Nothing more to say...Great job. God Bless~
Leola Ogle 07/16/12
WOW! So many great phrases in this poem. You did an excellent job with this enjoyable entry with many truths. God bless!
Genia Gilbert07/16/12
There is a lot of truth here,written with beautiful words. It seems to have much thought put into it. Good writing.
Hiram Claudio07/18/12
This was so good! I was paused by the line "She traded in a real crown for
A counterfeit tiara;" ... i wonder how many of us do that at different times in our walk, often pursing the temporal and forsaking the eternal. The flow of this piece was solid throughout.

An excellent piece of writing!
C D Swanson 07/19/12
Congratulations! God bless~
Genia Gilbert07/19/12
Congratulations. This was a very good entry, well-deserving of your placement.
Leola Ogle 07/19/12
Congrats Raymond! Good job!
Hiram Claudio07/19/12
Congratulations Sir! A well deserved "highly commended" recognition!
Noel Mitaxa 07/19/12
Congratulations on your HC. Well done.
Ellen Carr 07/20/12
Congratulations on your 'Highly Commended'. I really enjoyed your poem. There are some beautiful turns of phrase in it. Well done.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 07/23/12
Congratulations on your HC and for placing 16th overall!