The Official Writing Challenge
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I so enjoyed this. I'm bad at reading titles so I didn't see it at first and when I read the line I'm no uterus I laughed out loud. I can't help wonder if I had known the title if it might have reduced my eye-popping laughter.

I think you did a wonderful job of the opening paragraph and then take the reader on a ride into your imagination which was a wild, fun ride. It must be quite a trip to be inside that mind all of the time. I love the fact that you were able to share that with me.

Personally, I think it might have been stronger if you had ended at the end of the interview. Or perhaps you needed a little better transition because it did feel a bit abrupt to me. I like what you said in the end but you did a good job of taking me to the point already.

It's a beautiful message. I think other than the uterus line my next favorite part was working when it was broken. What a profound line that was and every single reader will relate to that. But we know God is with us during that time and that helps so much. This is an outstanding bit of writing.
06/16/12
good take on the topic, and very funny. I liked this, and liked your message.
06/16/12
A great lesson in taking care of our bodies. Such an imagination. It made me want to exercise more!
06/17/12
Clever, funny and different! After reading this story, I felt compelled to go for a five mile hike!

Nicely done. God Bless~
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