The Official Writing Challenge
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06/16/12
Very nice. The story fit the catagory well, and the dialogue was well done. I could feel the tension building.
06/16/12
Thank you for this story. You have presented the problems against which to guard one's heart in a plot I will remember for a long time. If only the leaders of the nations today had such wise uncles to train their minds.
06/16/12
You've presented us with emotions we must guard against in a story I will long remember. Oh, that the upcoming young leaders of the nations today had wise uncles to teach them with such honor and love.

Thank you for this story.
06/18/12
Great way to present the topic as it transcends not only the mental conditioning to fight physical battles, but the spiritual guards needed as well to fend for our souls. I like the way you were able to tell this tale, too. It flowed smoothly and believably and I could (with the dialogue) see everything going on.
06/18/12
i thought this was excellent writing...i enjoyed this guard your heart....thanks!
06/18/12
i thought this was excellent writing...i enjoyed this guard your heart....thanks!
06/18/12
Nice job with this one. I loved the historic feel to it.
06/19/12
Excellent --in all the ways that count for the challenge!
06/20/12
Excellent job! I really was taken in from the first sentence to the last. Thank you. God bless~
06/21/12
A good solid story that is right on topic. I agree with Verna it has all the elements required by the judges and should do well for you - I hope so, as it may encourage you to stay around for awhile.