The Official Writing Challenge
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06/01/12
Oh, this is so sad! Poor little Susan! My heart just aches for her and all those like her. Thanks for sharing! God bless!
06/02/12
How do I climb into the computer to hug the MC? Oh my aching heart! Well written entry. Nicely done. Now where are my tissues? God bless~
Good descriptions. I could see and feel the MC's pain. However, I found the flow of the story a bit choppy and confusing. Why was her mother leaving the third world tropical paradise? Why and where did the MC go at age 13? Sometimes telling a story in a limited numbr of word is challenging!
06/04/12
This did have the feel of being a mere glimpse into a much large story. However, it made me want to read that story and I too thought the way you painted the MC's pain and struggle was well done. I like that in the midst of all she's been through, she's calling out to the Lord for answers and for the strength to make it through.