The Official Writing Challenge
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11/02/05
I'm a bit unclear on how the first 3 paragraphs fit in with the rest of the article. But I LOVED the thoughts that you put into the heads of those at the dinner. Very creative.
11/02/05
Your first paragraph was excelelnt in the descriptions. I too was unsure of the tie in to the second half..I probably should reread it.(it is probably me today!) Otherwise, you write well:)
The comparison to 'chemical reactions' is unique and thought provoking. I enjoyed this article.
11/04/05
I was a little uncertain of the tie in-I thought it was just me. I think Bea caused a reaction when she entered the class, might be the exposed example. Really nice story and examples. God bless ya, littlelight
I enjoyed the paragraph starting "There are some stories in the Bible ..." Some really inspired thoughts in here. The early paragraphs about Bea were wellwritten and interesting but I feel there needs to be something more to link them with the rest of the piece.