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05/24/12
Amen. You did a great job describing the most amazing lesson to be learned. I was encouraged through your writing.
05/25/12
This story touched my heart and made it smile...particularly the ending. It was such a special entry, and held me captive. I loved it. Thank you. God Bless~
05/26/12
Nice tie-in to a spiritual lesson!
05/26/12
This was very good. I thoroughly enjoyed it.
05/26/12
Great use of the topic!

"For what can be known about God is plain to them, because God has shown it to them. For his invisible attributes, namely, his eternal power and divine nature, have been clearly perceived, ever since the creation of the world, in the things that have been made.". Romans 1:19-20
05/26/12
Oh, I like this!

My only suggestion would be to get rid of your first paragraph and just start with the man's prayer. Then after that first sentence, say something like "the man knelt by his bed..." so your readers know it's a man early on.

Reminds me of my favorite verses, Is. 40:30-31!
This is beautiful. There is a reason why the Bible refers to be lifted up on eagle's wings. Your story showed just why. I often look at nature or the stars and wonder how someone can not believe.
05/26/12
I loved the story as I got into it and you have a great ability to draw the reader in.

For me, the hook at the beginning was very weak and was your only flaw. I had to read for a while before I was drawn.

Your use of descriptive words is excellent.

Thank you.
05/28/12
Absolutely beautiful! Great lessons for one taking that first step of faith but also for then contrinuying to trust Him, every day, and every step of the way. Thank you so much.
05/29/12
This just made me stronger, and it is beautiful...I can see why you are a master...your words do bring Christ right up close to me.

God Bless
Wonderful exposition on "trust" in your story. Well done.
06/01/12
This is a beautiful story! I love the way you used the eagle. Well done, very well done.