The Official Writing Challenge
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Cute, humorous, and fun! One can almost see the watching parent, holding their breath and biting lower lip at the suspense!
05/25/12
Awww. I loved this. Great job of capturing the moments of "his first steps" and the internal emotions of all involved. Thanks.

God bless~
05/26/12
Oh, this was so precious! You absolutely captured Benny's inner battle and I was sooo rooting for him. I suspect little Benny is going to be a victor in life full of determination.
I think this is a brilliant piece of writing. You captivated me from the first words.

The only thing I would have liked is to know who Laura and Joy were. I figured Laura was a girl and Joy maybe a dog but not sure. I guess she could be another baby slightly older.

The sweet little Bennie did tug at my heart. What a clever and unique take on the topic. I often wonder what is going on in little ones' minds. You did a spectacular job of showing me.
05/26/12
Oh, this is GREAT! Sometimes you really can see babies thinking things through like this. I loved this.
05/26/12
This was a delightful read. I felt the determination grow, I cringed at the risk of a floor crawler among many feet, but I still didn't expect the steps.

Thank you.
05/28/12
I loved this line:
"Benny didn’t like being Joy’s pony."

Cute story!
05/28/12
Benny's frustration was tangible. You did great putting the reader in Benny's booties. :) The relief and accomplishment felt good. :) Super work!
I loved this and remember so well the story my mother loved to tell about how she and my dad tried to get me to walk; then one day I just stood up and walked all the way around the table.
05/31/12
Congratulations! God Bless~