The Official Writing Challenge
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05/18/12
I loved this contemporary piece. It held a ring of truth...and it was told with conviction. Nice job withe dialogue and internal feelings. I really enjoyed it. It was bittersweet.

Thanks. God bless~
I like the arrangement of this narrative poem--as well as the story.
Narrative poem form is very effective with this story. Kind of knew they knew but still you held the tension well. Title, opening and ending are all creative and satisfying.
05/21/12
Loved the flow, like the soft roll of a boat in calm waters. Sweet, and poignant, and I too, loved the narrative-poem arrangement.
05/24/12
Wonderful, a great story and very well deserving of its placing. Many congratulations.
05/24/12
Just beautiful. Congratulations!
05/24/12
Congratulations! Nicely done. God Bless~
05/24/12
Congratulations on first place! I enjoyed your story and getting to know your character. You told it in a creative way that kept me interested. Beautiful work!
05/24/12
Great job with this. Congratulations!
Congratulations on your win! This was so captivating and inspiring. Well done!
What a beautiful tearjerker! Everyone wants to be accepted and loved. This is the perfect story to illustrate that fact.
05/24/12
This was a masterpiece, and one of my all time favorites. Congratulations!
05/24/12
Way too awesome!!! And I have the privilege of saying you are a fabulously old, old FW friend! Awesome . . .
05/24/12
I didn't realize I was holding my breath until I started breathing again. Marvelous!
05/24/12
Another prodigal welcomed home! I loved this story and the chance to redeem ourselves in the lives of those who know us. Well told!
05/24/12
Author's note: WHOA, Pat! One "old" would have been plenty! :0)

Thanks for all the lovely comments. I appreciate and cherish each one. LG~