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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Fame (05/10/12)

TITLE: Star Crossed
By Sherry Castelluccio
05/16/12


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“How’s your ice cream, Angie?”

“Really good! Thank you for bringing me, Grandpa. Are you enjoying your summer?”

“Well, Angie-girl I am surely enjoying my time with you and that’s a fact. What grade are you in now? Sixth?”

“No, Silly! I’m starting high school this fall!”

“No kidding! You’re growing up before my eyes.”

Nathan took a swig of his soda and wiped his mustache. Suddenly Angie froze and stared slack-jawed across the restaurant.

“What are you lookin’ at honey?”

“Oh my gosh! That’s Jared Hicks right over there! I can’t believe it!” She squealed and bounced in her seat like a toddler on a sugar high.

“And who is Jared Hicks?”

“He’s the drummer in my favorite band, Deviant Misfit. He’s so hot!”

“Well, why don’t you go over there and introduce yourself? Ask him for his autograph.”

“Are you crazy? You don’t just, like go over and introduce yourself to Jared Hicks! Plus, he’s surrounded. They’re probably like his body guards and stuff.” She stared dreamily at the leather-clad rock star as her ice cream melted in the bowl. “Oh my gosh, he’s looking at us. Grandpa, he’s watching us!” She pulled a mirror out of her purse and moistened her chapped lips. “What if he comes over here? I think I’ll just die!”

At that moment Nathan and Jared the Rock Star locked eyes. Something stirred within Nathan’s spirit. Why did it feel like he knew the man?

Jared slowly rose from his chair and approached their table. Ignoring the stares from the other patrons, he leaned over and placed his hand on Nathan’s back.

“Excuse me, Sir. Are you Nathan Cross?”

“Sure am! Do we know each other?”

“Sort of. My dad was a friend of yours- Delbert Hicks? Do you remember him?”

“Delbert Hicks…You’re Delbert’s son?”

“The one and only!” Jared smiled and bowed.

“Well, I’ll be! It’s nice to meet you, boy! This here is my granddaughter, Angie. She’s a big fan of yours.”

Angie blushed and pulled out her cell phone. “Um, would you mind if I took a picture of you? My friends are never going to believe you came to our table!”

“I don’t mind on one condition.” Jared held up his index finger. “You let me join you.”

Nathan gestured to the empty chair next to him. “Have a seat.”

Jared took his jacket off and draped it over the chair. Folding his long legs under the table, he slouched back in his seat. “Angie, would you like to be in the photo too?”

Angie dropped her phone and coughed. “Um yeah, that would be great. Grandpa, would you take a picture of us?”

Nathan snapped the photo and returned the phone to his beaming granddaughter. “So how is your father these days? I haven’t seen him in thirty years or more.”

Jared frowned. “Sir, Dad died two years ago.”

“Ah, that’s too bad. He was a good man. I’m sorry to hear.”

“Thanks, I agree. Taught me everything I know about music.” said Jared.

“I’m not surprised. He was a fine bass player. Those were good times.” Nathan nodded and stared into his empty glass.

“That’s sort of what I came to talk to you about. I wanted to thank you.”

Nathan furrowed his brows. “Thank me? For what?”

“Before I graced the world with my presence Dad was pretty depressed. He was in his basement one morning, cleaning his gun when he heard this music coming from outside. He followed it all the way to your house. He must have stood on your porch listening to you play for an hour before anyone noticed him.”

“I remember that! My wife went to trim her rose bushes and there he was on the front step. Scared her to death!” He cackled at the memory.

“Did you know that Dad was planning on killing himself that morning, before the two of you met?”

“That a fact? Well the Lord sure has impeccable timing, doesn’t he?” Nathan stroked his chin. “Your father joined our band the next day.”

“When it became clear that I was destined to be a musician he became my manager. If you hadn’t been playing the trombone that morning Dad would have shot himself. I never would have been born.”

“And my granddaughter would have been deprived of her favorite rock star.” He winked as Angie sighed and twirled her hair.

Jared raised an invisible glass. “Here’s to fame!”

“Cheers!” said Nathan.

The two men laughed.


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CD Swanson 05/17/12
This was a light hearted story that made me feel good, and made me smile.

I adored the interaction and lively dialogue. Great lessons for all. Thanks.

God Bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 05/17/12
This is such a sweet story. I think it's quite clever that the real hero in the story was he r own grandfather not the rock star. You did a nice job showing how the Holy Spirit will intervene on our behalf. Well done.
Catrina Bradley 05/17/12
I smiled all the way through. :-) Great characters, fast-paced even tho there was no "action", and who doesn't love a feel-good story? I have to be honest - the ending is a little on the weak side, but it shouldn't cost you too much. The descriptions put right there me at the table - I felt like I was a part of the scene and was lifting an imaginary glass with them. Nice job!!!
Laura Manley05/18/12
Nicely written with just enough action and dialogue for a good balance. You did an excellent job in your presentation of the teenager's dialogue. You either have teenager's or are around them to appreciate they, like, are so, so...well you get the picture. Very nicely written!
Genia Gilbert05/19/12
Good dialogue and flow. I enjoyed all this. Very on- topic too.
Marina Rojas05/19/12
What a good story of how God works in His mysterious ways, even for those who are "famous".

Good conversation, kept real and down to earth.

I liked this!
Sandra Renee Hicks 05/19/12
Hi -

Certainly, this is a pleasant read.

Thank you for how you shared this rich message.
Leola Ogle 05/22/12
Good story with lively dialogue. The flow was great and made the read enjoyable. I really love this. God bless!
CD Swanson 05/24/12
Congratulations! Nicely done. God Bless~
Noel Mitaxa 05/24/12
Strong characters and totally believeable conversation, and I loved the twist of revealing God's working through a greater depth than the thrill of meeting an "idol." Well-deserved win.