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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Fame (05/10/12)

TITLE: A Price Too High
By Genia Gilbert
05/16/12


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ďOh, Mom, donít cry,Ē Terra whispered. She scooted into the pew as the congregation continued to clap. Terra had just finished her solo at the beginning of the worship service. Since Dad died, she and her mother, Celia, had become close. Mom had taught her to walk in Godís ways, living to please and honor Him. They had continued to attend the delightful country church where Terra had sung since she was only six. Now a senior in high school, she treasured Momís approval. She loved looking into Celiaís eyes as they filled with tears of pride and joy.


ďOh, Mom, donít worry,Ē Terra told Celia a couple of years later. Her college choir tour was something she had anticipated for months. She knew her mother was concerned about their lack of sponsors, as well as the inclusion of only two inspirational songs in their presentation. For that reason, Terra had made a special visit home to reassure her she still maintained her values and behavior. Still, she saw concern in her motherís eyes.


ďOh, Mom, donít be so unbending,Ē Terra said to Celia a few days after college graduation. She tried to explain her involvement with Christopher. Her mother was not pleased he had moved into Terraís apartment. She didnít seem to understand how handsome Chris was, or how helpful he could be in her quest to go further with her singing. Well, I canít remain under Momís thumb forever, Terra thought. Preparing to return to school, she kissed Celia goodbye, seeing the disapproval as their eyes met.


ďOh, Mom, donít put a damper on this,Ē Terra begged, a few years later. She had a recording contract, for goodness sake. It was super news. It would mean lots of money, travel, and fabulous experiences. Be happy for me, Mom, canít you? Iím even insisting they include a gospel song, Terra struggled with mixed emotions. Still, her mother did not share her excitement nor encourage her. This time Terra turned away, unwilling to meet that penetrating gaze.


ďOh, Mom, donít fret. Iíll get there right after Christmas,Ē Terra comforted Celia. She wasnít able to miss such a huge concert. She had the opening number, and rumors were that a movie producer would be there, looking to fill a singing role in an upcoming film. Feeling guilty, Terra realized she hadnít been home to Momís for almost two years now. She was thankful it was a phone conversation, and she could only visualize the disappointment in Celiaís eyes.


ďOh, Mom,Ē Terra whispered. She stood in the same little country church where she had sung her songs to the Lord all those years ago. In it, Terra sensed Godís presence as she had then, but in sadness instead of joy. This time there was a flower-covered casket at the front. In it lay her beautiful mother who had died suddenly the week before.


ďOh, Mom... Oh, MomÖ Oh, Mom.Ē

But her motherís eyes were closed.


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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 05/17/12
This made me cry, partially because my baby sings in the choir and is going to college in the fall. It really brings home the message that you never stop being their mother. Also just because you get them to 18 doesn't mean they are out of the woods yet. There are still many things to trap them in that big scary world. You did an outstanding job showing just that.
Camille (C D) Swanson 05/17/12
Beautifully done. This was so touching, my eyes are filled with tears. It really moved me. Thank you for this.

God Bless~
Marina Rojas05/19/12
This was a great reminder that the cost of chasing fame --and subsequently even having it in your arms-- sometimes carries a heavy price tag.

Really moving work.
Sandra Renee Hicks 05/19/12
Hi -

Talk about a rude awakening. The daughter needed it, though, to bring her to her senses.

That's the way it has to happen for us sometimes...

Thank GOD for his love, grace and forgiveness.
Dannie Hawley 05/21/12
Wow, pass the Kleenex! A fantastic job on this all-too-familiar story.
Leola Ogle 05/22/12
Wow! This really made an impact! Neglecting her mother for pursuit of fame left a hollow feeling in my gut. Good writing, great story, and powerful message. God bless!
Hiram Claudio05/23/12
What a powerful story - so moving. It grabbed me right from the start. This flowed so easily and was gripping throughout. All packed with an excellent message about the cost of chasing fame. Great title ... and a great overall piece of writing!
Noel Mitaxa 05/24/12
Power, clarity and restraint. Congratulations on your well-deserved win.
Camille (C D) Swanson 05/24/12
Congratulations! Nicely done. God Bless~
Laura Hawbaker 05/24/12
Congratulations! Very well written.