The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a great story. You intrigued me right from the beginning, especially with the Summer Olympics just around the corner.

The flow was a little stilted. Having more showing would help this. Instead of telling that Seth is hysterical show the reader by describing a shrill, fast voice with jumbled words.

The ending is sweet. I really liked how the father took the cue from the son and relied on God. You did a nice job writing on topic but still keeping it fresh and interesting.
This was such a good read. Nicely done, and so well written.

I loved the ending giving public display and honor to God. Made me smile and gave me goosebumps! Thanks.

God Bless~
I like your story a lot. It could have had a little more natural flow, I think, but it really puts things in right perspective through your MC. Good job!
I liked the concept of this writing, I'm always a sucker for a happy ending!

I would have liked to be rooting for the dad to become the coach, but somehow I wasn't...but I was happy in the end about how it all turned out.

Good story! Enjoyed the ending. God bless.
Nice writing here and the story grabbed you right from the start. I like the way you turned the father froma man with very out of balance priorities to one who "gets it." The transition was a bit quick but I thought it still felt real. Good job!
An enjoyable read that keeps one reading from start to the end. I like the story plot of the MC choosing God first over all else, and then the reward that came after for his obedience. Excellent writing!