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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Weary (05/03/12)

TITLE: If You Fall
By Amanda Brogan


The weight of the world is crashing down upon my shoulders. Crushing. Smothering. Does God really expect me to carry this load alone?

It seems …

far too …


I summon all the strength of my limbs only to find them lacking; like an endless well gone dry. I dig in deep, but the bucket of strength is drawn up empty.

If only I had water for my parched soul. Just a small, life-giving drink to wash over my frail spirit.

Just …

one …


Surrounded, yet alone, the grime and filth of Rock Bottom pulls my knees like a magnet. Hell grips my ankles with a maniacal cackle, dragging me, mocking me. Blood and sweat mix with arid dust in a ruby-copper swirl of mud. A moan escapes through teeth long clenched, slipping through its prison bars as an inmate free but broken. Fingers flex to form a fist, to grasp for relief and peace from afar, but the effort dies in vain. Limbs slacken, joints fall limp like leaves of a weeping willow tree – too fatigued, too weary to hold themselves up.
My Father …

where are You?

I can’t go on, my life like lead, the weight too great for me to bear. I need my God, my Holy One, to lift me from this widening chasm. A sagging head, hung low in shame; disgrace swathes my dejected form as a garment unfit for mortals to bear.

Too thirsty …

too lonely …

too …


Stretching, reaching, yearning for my God, I don’t feel His touch. If only He would reach over part of the distance. If only He would hold me up.

If only …

it would …


Life is slipping. Letting go. I can’t go on. Too tired to try. Eyes are closing. Blood is draining.

It …

is …


With dying breath, a new life shines. The manacles of Satan unclench from my feet. Arms open wide with Heaven’s strength, I now can say:

All who are weary …

come to Me.


Having then a great high priest, who has passed through the heavens, Jesus the Son of God, let us hold fast our confession. For we have not a high priest that cannot be touched with the feeling of our infirmities … Let us therefore draw near with boldness unto the throne of grace, that we may receive mercy, and may find grace to help us in time of need. Hebrews 4:14-16

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Glynis Becker05/10/12
Perfect word choices, love the formatting and the message is timeless. Fantastic work!
C D Swanson 05/11/12
I am amazed at all of the talented writers, and the entries presented in FW.

This one was simply fabulous and explosive. It touched my heart and spoke to my soul.

I loved it, and I thank you for bringing to us.

God bless~
Ellen Carr 05/11/12
Really well written, gripping and moving.And I didn't realise until the end Who it was really about. Well done!
Joe Moreland05/12/12
I can't say enough how impactful this is. What a great glimpse you have given us and what a great message. Thanks so much for sharing this piece with us.
Laury Hubrich 05/15/12
You're right. I didn't know it was Jesus you were writing about until the end. Great job!
lynn gipson 05/16/12
I felt every emotion with this one...you led us on with every word. Love it.
Beautiful and excellent are the words that come to mind first.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 05/17/12
This is so beautiful. I sensed immediately that Jesus was speaking to me alone. How wonderful to have a God who loves us enough to experience many feelings we as human have so he can proclaim, I understand how that feels come to me and I will give you rest. This is a winner in my book!
Graham Insley05/17/12
Very powerful emotions and strong graphics.

Now we know where to turn to; because He has felt the weariness of it all like no other.

Thank you.
Laura Chambers 05/17/12
Beautiful! I didn't know it was Jesus until the last words! :D
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 05/17/12
Congratulations for placing 22 overall!
Michael Throne05/18/12
I especially like the rhythm of this piece. Well done! I didn't see where the story was going until much later than I should have. I like this. Good writing.