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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Weary (05/03/12)

TITLE: The Weeping Willow Waltz
By Marlene Bonney
05/09/12


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Cassie carried the weight of her world on stooped, thin shoulders. But her bright eyes and quick, pixie smile belied the condition of an aching, childish figure already work-worn . . . she absently picked at a rough hangnail, torn from weeding the long-neglected garden behind their old farmhouse, as she herded her younger siblings down the country road leading to the one-room schoolhouse a couple miles down yonder. Jostling lunch pails banged against knobby knees, an off-key drumbeat to the bird choruses bouncing through the air amidst the children's idle chatter. A ragtag band of urchins, to be sure,

“But, at least their clothes is clean and their hair neatly combed,” a wisp of unaccustomed pride welling up inside Cassie, because if it weren’t for her, Daisy, Polly, Ben and Charlie would still be abed on their misshapen floor mattresses. Even now, their Pop was sprawled across their only cot, snoring off the weekend’s boozing binge.

It had been a challenge to keep the younger ones out of his way this time, the stormy weather keeping them indoors. Cassie had become “innovative” (a spelling word from last week’s lessons) by creating a treasure hunt that took them up to the nooks and crannies of an attic right out of a haunted story penny-novel. She’d even managed to make a picnic out of their meager food supply, minus the curdled milk beside the overripe bananas blackening on the scarred kitchen counter. They made a game of cleaning up, pretending they were Peter Pan’s lost boys—brave in the face of another motherless adventure.

Cassie’s mind played ping-pong between planning a sparse evening supper while tying Daisy’s runaway shoestrings, chiding Ben and Charlie for throwing rocks at the birds and calming Polly’s fears of just about everything. Somehow they all arrived in one piece without being tardy. Cassie relaxed somewhat as she relinquished her charges to capable Miss Robart, their stern but kind, teacher.

“I’m going to be a schoolmarm just like her someday,” Cassie dreamed between lessons, “and I’ll be ‘independent’ ”—another fascinating spelling bee word.


Cassie only occasionally wondered what it would have been like if her Ma had not run off. The trips back and forth to their property’s impractically distant well would have been a burden even for her.

“I don’t mind, Miss Robart. There’s a beautiful huge ol’ weepin’ willow tree on the way. I just love watchin’ the dew-drenched branches dancin’ and glist’ning through the rays of the risin’ sun—like romantic shimmering cascades of sage green.”

“Cassandra, I vow, you have such a talent for telling stories and describing nature! I’d like to share some of my books with you to further develop your writing--you will enjoy Emerson and Browning’s works, especially.”

Consequently, Cassie expanded her vocabulary, retrieving an aged dusty Webster’s dictionary from the attic. But, between house and garden chores and tending to the needs of her younger charges, she would fall asleep with a book, as exhausted and tired as Rip Van Winkle.



By the time she was sixteen, Cassie’s strength had been stretched beyond its limits. Physically, she was toughened and muscled by the hard work; but emotionally, she was drained and heart-weary. Her aspirations of becoming a teacher had faded over the years like a photographer’s underdeveloped tintype, the willow tree with its drooping mass of tangled tendrils as forlorn as her tedious life . . .



Grace, tearfully interrupting her mother’s narrative, “I never realized how burdened a childhood you had. No one could guess you’ve ever been discouraged, Mom; you’re so upbeat and cheerful.”

“Sweetheart, I am telling you my history now because soon you are leaving for university,” gently placing a worn Bible on her daughter’s lap, “this has made all the difference in my life. I know you’re already a Christian, honey, but there will be times when you are discouraged and tired, lonely and care-worn. When that happens, I trust you will open this Book and be uplifted.”

Grace gently lifted the cover of the Bible to find this inscription:

“To Cassandra, my inspiration,
upon her graduation.

‘Those who hope in the LORD will renew their strength.
They will soar on wings like eagles;
they will run and not grow weary,
they will walk and not be faint.’ Isaiah 40:31.

Fondly, Your teacher, Miss Emily Robart”

Mother and daughter walked arm-in-arm over to the transplanted weeping willow tree, watching its glistening limbs dancing in the light of the silvery moon.


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Sarah Heywood05/10/12
Oh, this was nice! I would love to read a whole story of the events that transpired from Cassie's early days in the schoolhouse to where she was by the end of the story. You definitely caught my attention with this story!
Danielle King 05/11/12
This is really good story telling. You brought it to life wonderfully with the word pictures. I want to read the next the next installment.
Danielle King 05/11/12
Ooops! That's one next too many!
CD Swanson 05/11/12
I loved this story. It was interesting and moved quickly while keeping the readers attention.

Beautifully done. God Bless~
Joe Moreland05/12/12
A beautiful word picture of how life can get in the way of our hopes and dreams, but God can still lift you up in spite of all that. I love your MC and her strength of character and perseverance.
Amy Michelle Wiley 05/14/12
Awww, beautiful story, though sad in parts. Love her use of language and how you explained why a child had a big vocabulary. Watch out for times when you are missing a subject in the narration between bits of dialogue. Otherwise good job!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 05/17/12
The title is a perfect fit for this story of courage and love. I felt my eyes brimming with tears and could easily picture it as a TV show as the story unfolded in my mind.