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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Weary (05/03/12)

TITLE: Weary Dreams
By Verna Cole Mitchell
05/08/12


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So tired ere I went to sleep,
I slipped into such slumber deep,
I dreamed that I could overhear
Complaints of nature in my ear.
- - - - - -
“I’m sick of shining,” sighed the sun.
“What’s more; my job is never done,
And I’m as lonely as can be
With only clouds for company.”

“You think you’re tired,” moaned the moon.
“I’m so exhausted, I could swoon.
I get no sleep the live-long night
While you are keeping out of sight.”

“We’re drained,” declared a crowd of clouds,
Arrayed in varied colored shrouds.
“We shed our raindrops as we can,
Fill up, and let them go again.”

“How tiresome,” maintained the stars,
“To be viewed through binoculars.
There doesn’t seem to be a chance
That we could have a private dance.”

“And we are weary,” said the waves.
“Of acting like the ocean’s slaves,
Continuously pounding shore.
Such repetition’s quite a bore.”

“We’re likewise worn out,” whined the winds,
“From huffing, puffing without end.
We wouldn’t dare to hold our breath,
For fear we’ll find an early death.”

Deploring how these all complained,
Some flowers put them all to shame,
“We’re drooping now, but we know later
We’ll be refreshed by our Creator.”
- - - - - - - -
When I awoke, to my surprise,
The sun was smiling in my eyes.
I realized my need for rest
Had dressed the world in weariness.


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Danielle King 05/11/12
Loved it! Clever and witty and jogged along beautifully. I recognise the author's style too!
Beth LaBuff 05/11/12
Things always seem brighter in the light of a new day! :) As always your meter is perfect. Your alliteration is stunning. Some of my favorite images are the "dancing with the stars" :) and the waves slaves of the shore. This is beyond creative. I'd LOVE to see this one illustrated. It would delight all ages. I tip my hat to you.
Camille (C D) Swanson 05/11/12
What an imaginative entry, and lovely poem. I particularly loved the "stars comments" about being tired from being viewed.

Thank you for this.
God Bless~

Joe Moreland05/12/12
Very well written, imaginative and wonderful alliteration. I don't have much to say about poetry usually, because I am certifiably unqualified to judge the quality of a poem, but I know when something makes me smile and won't let me stop reading until the end. That's what this did for me. Awesome job.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 05/17/12
Oh this is a beautiful perfect piece. I picture it as a child's bedtime story. It's the perfect picture book full of imagination for the child and a wonderful message to the parent reading it. I think it could be the new Good Night Moon!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 05/17/12
Congratulations for placing 9th in level 4 and 12th overall!
Yvonne Blake 05/18/12
I'm so glad the Creator doesn't weary! Great poem, Verna