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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Threefold Cord (04/12/12)

TITLE: old lovers
By Jim McWhinnie
04/18/12


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in the starfall of a late September night,
and in the half-light of a low and quarter moon,
two old lovers stroll hand in hand, you and I,
through the scent of southern jasmine, while in the distance
the cry of a lonely loon.

in the starfall of a late September night,
we lose ourselves in the long remembered mist
and in the dreams, the greying dreams,
of what might be and what came to be
among all those many magic moments, when we heaven kissed.

in the starfall of a late September night,
we wander through the lighted shadows
as streetlamps cast their opal glow
upon the footsteps that we softly place,
then as we pause ‘side a cottage fence and snatch a single rose.

in the starfall
of a late September night,
our whimsy path is crossed by a cat of calico,
a prowling cat, a neighbor’s cat, a somehow rather friendly cat
that stops to meow, to rub, to even in a way to love,
to sense what brings these human souls
to pass the time, the time when life begins to slow.

in the starfall
of this late September night,
in the whispers of our quiet, thankful sighs,
we feel once more those three-fold ties
that keep us lingering side by side,
to cheat once more our last good-byes.


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CD Swanson 04/19/12
Hauntingly beautiful. Beautifully done.

God Bless~
Dolores Stohler04/20/12
I loved your poetic images, so many beautiful lines. I felt as though I was enjoying the night with you. Well done.
Laury Hubrich 04/21/12
I've decided there is nothing like old love. <3 Wonderful poem. I feel like I lived a decade with this couple.
Graham Insley 04/21/12
This is great. A beautiful piece of poetry.
Ellen Carr 04/22/12
A beautiful poem with beautiful language. Lovely!
Lillian Rhoades 04/22/12
Loved the poem, but I'm wondering if it fell short of the topic, except for the one line near the end.
Donna Wilcher 04/22/12
Lovely, and oh so sweet. I enjoyed it immensely!
Allison Egley 04/22/12
Nice job with this.

I think I like how you mentioned the third cord without mentioned WHAT the cord it, but I'm not sure. lol My over-analytical mind keeps trying to tell me it's something else than the obvious. ;)

This was beautiful. I loved the longer last line in each stanza.
Margaret Kearley 04/24/12
Thisa is just beautiful, what wonderful descriptions. I particularly love the last verse, it really touched my heart. Thank you.
Laura Manley04/24/12
Very nicely done! As I mentioned to another person who wrote a poetry entry, I personally would find that a challenge in itself. I admire your ability. I think one of my very favorite lines is your very last line. Blessings...
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 04/25/12
Beautiful. I love the repetition It drives the message home and brings the poem full-circle.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 04/26/12
Congratulations for placing 10th in level four and 11th overall!