The Official Writing Challenge
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04/19/12
I'm pretty sure this just made my day. I couldn't stop smiling throughout ... and giggling. I love the funny owner guy's accent. :) (Also like your note at the end. HeHe!)
04/19/12
Well done! Held my attention throughout. Spot on the topic and entertaining.
04/19/12
Hahahahahahahahahahahahaha. This was too funny for words. I loved it, such a clever and witty story.

God bless~
04/21/12
I love your story. Well told with great humour. I love the accent and way of speech of the dodgy operator. Very funny. Well done.
04/22/12
I really enjoyed this and agree with all the comments about accent.

You found a witty way to show the truth of a three fold cord in reverse.

Great job.
04/22/12
This made me Laugh Out Loud throughout! Great job!
Reading this was pure fun!
04/24/12
You have a great imagination for writing! I loved your story and the little twist at the end. Nicely done! Blessings...
04/25/12
What a lot of fun this was. I felt the frustration and disbelief of what the mc was experiencing. Your well done dialogue made me hear the owner's voice. Very good.
Ohh how I love it when I start giggling right away. This is wonderful and hysterical. I love the dialog. The only red ink I spotted is once you said by and I think it should have been my. This is pure genius. I have read so many stories about that Bible verse this week but I love your reverse psychology take on it. What a fun, clever, fresh take on the topic. One of my favorites, for sure.