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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Holiday (04/05/12)

TITLE: The Moon on Holiday
By Verna Cole Mitchell


ďIím leaving night,Ē declared the moon.
ďIím going on holiday.
I need a rest from lighting earth
I want some time to play.

I Ďm tired of that silly cow
Thatís jumping over me,
And of the dog that laughs at him
For such a sight to see.

The man who hides inside of me
Should find another place,
Then cease from looking out through mine
And show his own true face.

While many children ask for me,
I find that not surprising.
They want the things they cannot have;
At least, thatís my surmising.

As to the wolves who howl at me
And dogs who at me bay,
I wonder what theyíll bellow at
When I have gone away.

Though some might think that they hung me,
That only God could do.
Itís time that I accept the fact:
My work is not yet through.

So I wonít go on holiday;
Iíll keep my given station,
The one that God had planned for me
As part of His creation.

Iíll go on shining in the dark;
My duty I wonít shirk.
Iíll make my own vacation time
And play games while I work.Ē

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Danielle King 04/12/12
I love this cute poem. Especially 'the silly cow that jumped over me.' I'm still laughing at that line. Very comical and original for the topic.
Beth LaBuff 04/12/12
Wow! This is "over the moon" creative! I, too, smiled at the moon tired of the cow jumping over it and the dog laughing. Each stanza is so cleverly crafted from additional moon sayings and folklore. I absolutely loved this (and wish I'd written it). This poem has single-handedly made me aware of the moon's plight and I will be more sensitive in the future to just how much we ask of and depend on the moon. :)
Camille (C D) Swanson 04/12/12
Clever and so well written. Excellent job. So original.
God bless~
Kristine Baker04/12/12
I love your originality in your work . So fun!
Graham Insley 04/18/12
This made me chuckle. a unique approach.

I felt some of the lines were too long and really fouled up the rythm. but then rythm is not my best subject and poetry is so personal.

Colin Swann04/18/12
I had a chuckle at this. Loved it. I still think the moon needs a holday though, with all of what it has to put up with.
Dannie Hawley 04/18/12
Wonderfully fun read! I know absolutely not a thing about poetry or how it should be written, sadly; but, I know I loved it and I understand that counts, too.
Donna Wilcher04/18/12
Very cleaver!
Edmond Ng 04/19/12
This poem speaks deep down, stirring up emotions to show the cost He paid and the extent of His love for us. Excellent piece!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 04/19/12
Oh I love this. The words just flowed off the screen. When I walk the dog at night I take solace in the moon and stars and wonder how one could look at them and not believe in God. However, it seems like weeks since I last saw the moon out. I know it hasn't been that long at all but I really missed it so your story struck a special chord with me. Congratulations for ranking 19th overall!