The Official Writing Challenge
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10/31/05
Lovely poem, but what does it have to do with the topic? Also, what is the connection between the poem and the Bible verse?
11/02/05
I understand the the "keepsake" refered to in the title is your own alabaster box of items that are precious to you. A few edits would clarify this for your readers. There are several spelling and punctuation boo-boos. I really think this poem has great potential; the concept of keeping treasures is a beauty.
11/03/05
Interesting poem. We call this a "push", hard hitting. Grammar not withstanding, there is room to grow in this poem. Thanks for sharing.
11/04/05
I'm not a great lover of poems without a rhythmic beat, so my comments won't help, as I found no lilting lift...but nice for that type of poem.