The Official Writing Challenge
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10/31/05
Well-written and enjoyable. I wanted more though, especially at the end. How did the fragrance make him feel better? Why? Who was it from?
10/31/05
I could picture the scene so clearly from your writing. It is amazing the small things that seem so insignificant that can be so comforting to us.
10/31/05
Smell is the most ancient of the senses that evokes emotion. You've captured a piece of that in your story.
11/01/05
In a word .. Awesome. A touch of darkness, unfolding to deliverance. Very well done.
11/02/05
I agree. It's true that miraculous way in which God brings comfort and deliverence to our souls. Knows our hearts.
This is well done. God bless ya, littlelight
11/02/05
I'm sure its just me, but I have a hard time with stories that start out highly realistic, then introduce a supernatural element in a matter-of-fact way. I wonder if Brian's healing revelation could have been brought about in a more typical way...but like I said, that's just personal preference. Your writing is top-notch, very deftly capturing Brian's pain.
11/02/05
You have a wonderful skill with description. I was unsure about the ending..but you write beautiful
11/03/05
Very well done, ever have one of those moments when you say "wish I had written that" - my impression tonight. blessings - dub