Hire
Writers
Editors
Home Tour About Read What's New Help Forums Join
My Account Login
Shop
Save
Support
E
Book
Store
Learn
About
Jesus
  



The HOME for Christian writers! The Home for Christian Writers!
The Official Writing Challenge

BACK TO
CHALLENGE
MAIN

INSTRUCTIONS

how it works
submission rules
guidelines for
choosing a level

ENTRIES

submit your entry
read current entries
read past entries
challenge winners



Our Daily Devotional HERE
Place it on your site or
receive it daily by email.





TRUST JESUS TODAY

TRY THE TEST



Share
how it works   Submit

Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Predicament (03/01/12)

TITLE: Only Passing By
By Melanie Kerr
03/08/12


 LEAVE COMMENT ON ARTICLE
 SEND A PRIVATE COMMENT
 ADD TO MY FAVORITES

So much to do
No time to spare
A festive meal
I must prepare
But I知 only passing by

Wine to buy
Unleavened bread
Crossed off the list
Inside my head
But I知 only passing by

A choking crowd
Swarms like flies
Stings my ears
With noisy cries
But I知 only passing by

A push, a poke
A gasp, a grunt
Soon I知 standing
At the front
But I知 only passing by

A cruel parade
A brutal show
Crooks with crosses
Moving slow
But I知 only passing by

A slip, a stumble
A crashing fall
And people stare
Don稚 care at all
But I知 only passing by

Exposed, uncovered
Caught and tagged
From the crowd I知
Drafted, dragged
But I知 only passing by

禅wixt hawk and buzzard
I am caught
A fearful plight
I never sought
But I知 only passing by

To bear his cross
I知 called to do
Step by step I値l see
This journey through
But I知 only passing by

His blood excludes me
From my feast
I知 bread polluted with
Leaven, yeast
But I知 only passing by

I hold resentment
In my hand
Complain that I
Don稚 understand
But I知 only passing by

They see this man
And now see me
I知 linked to Him
For all to see
But I知 only passing by

He stops to comfort
Those that weep
Into my heart His
Warm words seep
But I知 only passing by

I hear His words and
See a face
The Lord of Heaven
God of Grace
But I知 only passing by

His breath on me
My spirit stirs
His blood on me
New hope confers
But I知 only passing by

I値l walk Him home
My dying friend
And know that on the cross
All curses end
I知 no longer passing by


Based on Mark 15:21-22


The opinions expressed by authors may not necessarily reflect the opinion of FaithWriters.com.
Accept Jesus as Your Lord and Savior Right Now - CLICK HERE
JOIN US at FaithWriters for Free. Grow as a Writer and Spread the Gospel.


This article has been read 783 times
Member Comments
Member Date
CD Swanson 03/08/12
One word - "Beautiful."

God bless~
Danielle King 03/09/12
Two words - Simply beautiful!
Donna Wilcher 03/10/12
I have two more words to add the list...Absolutely Superb!
Very compelling, it took my breath away. Wow!

Yvonne Blake 03/10/12
Wow! So touching and dramatic! This is beautiful. Thank you.
Verna Cole Mitchell 03/11/12
Very creative. I loved the poetry and the meaning it conveyed.
Laura Manley03/14/12
I compliment you on your ability to write good rhyme. I do not have that ability. I write free verse. I liked the easy flow of this poem. I did, however, find the following verse a little awkward:

To bear his cross
I知 called to do
Step by step I値l see
This journey through
But I知 only passing by

The two lines beginning with step by step seem to not read as smoothly as the others. Also, in my opinion, the first line of that verse should have "His" in caps giving Him reverence.

This was very well written and I enjoyed it immensely.

Danielle King 03/15/12
A BIG congratulations Melanie for placing 1st with this beautiful poem! Well deserved!
CD Swanson 03/15/12
Congratulations!

Blessings~
Margaret Kearley 03/15/12
Just beautiful Melanie. The last verse - particularly wonderful. Great depth and insight - from Simon of Cyrene's viewpoint. A very well deserved win - many congratulations
Nancy Bucca 03/15/12
Congratulations on another well deserved win! This poem flowed beautifully, an eloquent rendition of the plight of Simon of Cyrene.
Melinda Melton 03/15/12
Wow. I love this piece. Congratulations on your win! Many blessings to you.
Linda Goergen03/15/12
Congratulations on your well deserved first place win! Just an awesome poem!! Simon of Cyrene certainly was put in a predicamentbut wow, one that turned out to be the blessing of his life. You tell it all so well! Applause! Terrific job!
Ellen Carr 03/31/12
A really good poem. Captures the feel of the scene well. Well done!