The Official Writing Challenge
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Wow this is intense. I felt myself trembling as I read it. It reminded me of the song "Killing Me Softly" I felt like you were looking right into me and telling the whole world my secrets.

My only red ink is I think it would have been a much stronger ending had you left the last line off. The readers you are meant to touch will get it so clearly and in neon signs they don't need that question. Those who do won't seem themselves in the answer.

This is an outstanding piece and so spot on for the topic. I can't even begin to tell you the impact it has on me. Thank you
03/08/12
Wow - This was overwhelmingly powerful and left me breathless.

This was so clever and so wonderful. Thank you. Amazing job with this.

I know this will earn a win or an EC for sure.

God Bless~
03/09/12
Great story ... it had a haunting feel to it as it turned from reading someone else's account to, at the end, being asked about my lumps. Very pointed and well written.
03/12/12
An inspiring story that shows us the importance of handing our messes over to God ... no matter how big they are or how long we've hidden them. Nice job!
03/13/12
A powerfully written story, one that causes the reader to ponder and reflect. Very moving. Thanks for sharing. God bless!
03/13/12
I like allegories. They get the message through better than direct approach. This piece speaks to the heart. Nicely written.
Congratulations for placing 13th in level 3!