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03/08/12
I LOVED it!! Perfect fit for the topic. You wrapped in several elements of types of predicaments many Christians find themselves in these days. Many people will be able to relate. I especially loved the end. I could just picture the M/C at the balcony, in the middle of the mall, communing with God and coming to a momentous decision. Excellent writing!
I enjoyed this. The conflict was riveting and it does seem like people are afraid of all of the wrong things.
03/08/12
Brilliant writing!

Wonderful story and clever use of topic. Nicely done!

Simply adored the ending...perfect.

God Bless~
03/09/12
Wow! I really like this. It seems I've read it somewhere before though, or perhaps it's similar to one I read. Good writing! God bless!
03/09/12
An engaging story that pulled me in from the very beginning. I enjoyed Mandy's journey and the subtle, yet meaningful, way you explored her world. This is wonderful writing. Blessings!
03/13/12
An interesting plot and enjoyable read. It is unimaginable to think of Christmas without Christ, the reason for the season. Your MC has made a wise decision to leave Babylon. Excellent piece of writing! God bless.
03/13/12
This story resonated with me. Reminds me of what I've experienced in my kids' school, and recently, at a Christmas parade.

Anyway, loved the tone, the message, the plot.

My only comment, and this is a personal preference, is to spell out numbers when you can, like "two-hundred-year-old oak, and three-foot cord. Again, this is a personal preference, I can't even remember where I picked it up--some article years ago--and I have no idea how others stand on this issue.
03/13/12
This story resonated with me. Reminds me of what I've experienced in my kids' school, and recently, at a Christmas parade.

Anyway, loved the tone, the message, the plot.

My only comment, and this is a personal preference, is to spell out numbers when you can, like "two-hundred-year-old oak, and three-foot cord. Again, this is a personal preference, I can't even remember where I picked it up--some article years ago--and I have no idea how others stand on this issue.
Congratulations for placing 8th in level 3!