The Official Writing Challenge
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I really loved the first half of this story - especially the first paragraph. Your phrasing and pacing in this part were impeccable. To me, the last half seemed to have too much action condensed into it to really do your idea justice. A tough one with this word limit!
10/26/05
I have to agree, the first half flowed and accurately decribed the scene.. I was pulled along nicely and then the action began and I had a tough time staying caught in the emotion of it. This would make a really nice longer story. Your writing and dialogue was great! I could see the characters.
You all know I LOVED this one. The A.N.V. and my home of Fredericksburg, VA. Excellent essay and very rich in detail and period accuracy. I can easily picture the scene in my "mind's eye" and the characters were portrayed in a wonderful fashion. I would explore taking this type of story to the next level as there is a growing market for historical fiction. Well done. My hats off to you.