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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: rain (10/17/05)

TITLE: This Dance
By Pat Guy
10/23/05


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She twirled about, this princess of mine,

in the drizzle of the afternoon.

Her face to her Father, her heart in the clouds,

a smile that left too soon.

“Oh daughter of mine, what can I do,

to bring to your face the light?”

“Oh make it rain! So we can dance,

to God, sitting way up high!”

I reach out my hand. Our fingers touch.

The Heavens open wide.

Tears of Love rain upon her heart,

God draws her to His side.

She twirls about, this princess of His,

in the dazzle of His Light.

Her face to her Father, her heart in the clouds,

a smile I see up high.

Years slowly fade. My heart grows weary,

of battling bitter storms.

Darkness hovers, strength gives way,

my Father speaks tender and warm.

“Oh daughter of mine, what can I do,

to bring to your face the light?”

“Oh make it rain, so I can dance,

to You, sitting way up high!”

He reaches out. Our fingers touch.

The Heavens open wide.

Tears of Love, rain upon my heart,

He draws me to His side.

We twirl about, my princess and I,

in the smile of His eyes.

In the beam of Love, our hearts become,

this dance of Love and Light!


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Garnet Miller 10/26/05
This is a beautiful poem. Sadness comes in our lives. But eventually we are all reunited, to dance together in the presence of the Lord! Well constructed poetry:)
terri tiffany10/27/05
Lovely!!
Jan Ackerson 10/27/05
Absolutely lovely.
Jeffrey Snell10/27/05
Good job. The simple structure flows and communicates God's gentle love.
Anita Neuman10/27/05
Great job on this! A sweet, sentimental read with good flow.
Laurie Glass10/27/05
A lovely poem that draws the reader in and makes a person want to spend time in God's presence. Very nice.
Shari Armstrong 10/28/05
Beautiful -I could see our daughter doing this
Linda Watson Owen10/29/05
Just beautiful! You've so captured the rhythm of this special dance in the lines of your poem. Lovely!
Brandi Roberts10/30/05
I want this one to win. The first line made me cry. I loved this, I loved this, I loved this! That's all I can say!
Amy Michelle Wiley 10/30/05
This is a precious poem! So touching and beautiful!
dub W10/31/05
A very good poem. A couple of beat hic-ups but a delightful story complete with poetic dialog.