The Official Writing Challenge
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02/23/12
WOW! This was a good entry, it sounded like it could be based on a true story.

Thanks for it. Great ending. God Bless~
02/23/12
Such a well written, entertaining read! I know boys will be boys, but WOW, poor Dad...talk about scaring the man half to death! Glad you lived to tell the story! At least a lesson was learned...the hard way!
02/24/12
My, you have a way with words. The first line is brilliant, and I loved this:

"We weren’t poor; we just didn’t have any money. When we opened our windows of a morning, the birds threw bread into us; and a plane crash three blocks away once caused about fifteen dollars’ worth of improvements."

I recall one instruction in writing that says, 'Never tell us what you're going to write next." And, when I read 'At this point I will switch to quoting Dad...' I was sort of thrown out of the piece. Perhaps, something like 'As for the rest of the story, Dad retells it best...' would flow more smoothly.

At any rate, I enjoyed the story, and I was especially entertained by your voice.

02/25/12
Oh my! I always know I'm in for a good read when my face hurts from smiling so much. This is too crazy to be anything but a true story and I loved it! Great job. What a wonderful way to start my day!
02/28/12
I kept hoping throughout the whole story that they kids inthe back would be okay - I was that engaged. This truly was a well crafted piece of writing. I thought it flowed well. Good job!
02/29/12
Very entertaining and descriptive.
02/29/12
I remember experiencing a terrifying ride similar to this, except I was on the hood of the car. I'm sure these two boys, like me, could hardly walk when it was over. Wow! You made this LIVE!
02/29/12
Oh my, I just couldn't help but love those two mischievous little boys! Like Theresa, I loved the line 'we weren't poor, we just didn't have any money.' Good job, well written! God bless!
03/02/12
Noel, you're nothing short of a hooligan! When I was a young girl my older brother plonked me on the back of his motorbike and roared off into the sunset. I was petrified and can break out in spots just thinking about it. Your story reminded me of my experience. Boys will be boys!
03/03/12
Congratulations for ranking 6th in level three! HAPPY DANCE!