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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Experiment (02/16/12)

TITLE: The Walk
By Clyde Blakely
02/22/12


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“Can you see anything?”

I can’t see a thing! How did I get into this situation?

“Can you see?”

“No!”

“Good. Now take my hand.”

“I can’t see your hand, how can I take it?”

“Raise you hand and I’ll take it.”

I’m supposed to trust him? How can I when I just met him? Okay I’ll let him guide me for now but I can still back out anytime I want.

Hands meet; I wish his grasp was a little firmer, “Don’t let me fall!”

“I won’t.”

Slowly moving forward, “Trust me. You’re taking baby steps, walk normal.”

Walk normal! How can I walk normal when I can’t see anything ahead?

“Your hand is gripping pretty hard; it’s as tense as the rest of you. Be still, I can see where we’re going.”

Maybe if I knew him better or I could see where we were going or he would tell me what’s to come. Where are we going any way? “Where are you leading me?”

“This is part of your walk. I can’t tell you or you might want to try to get there on your own, without me. Don’t worry, be calm and follow.”

How can I be calm when all I can think about is this walk and not having something happen to me I won’t like? This promise he’s made, how do I know he will keep it? What if I trip, will he catch me in time? Try to relax.

“Good, you are moving easier. Remember that this walk is by faith, a trust walk. You are learning to trust me, I can tell. You’re not as tense, your walk is smoother and your stride is getting longer.”

I wish he would not talk so much, I’m trying to focus on this ‘walk’ and not on his directions. I can’t sense a thing that’s ahead of me.

“You’re tensing again. Listen to me. If there is a danger ahead I’ll tell you at the right time in order to avoid it.”

That does it! If there’s danger ahead!? Why am I giving up my independence to be lead around by the hand and I can’t see where I’m going? I’m taking this blindfold off.

“Oh, no! We were almost there.” The leaders hand partially covers the walker’s eyes.

Before them stands a table spread with the most beautiful feast he had ever seen. Others who had arrived earlier were waiting.

“I didn’t know where you were leading me! Wow, do I still get into this banquet?”

“This is a walk by faith. You’ll have to start over and learn to follow. Now that you’ve had a glimpse of what I’ve prepared for you are you ready to try again?”

“Lead the way!”

His perception is clearer; he readily takes the Leader’s nail scarred hand.


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CD Swanson 02/23/12
Wow - I loved it! Thank you so much. Great job.

God Bless~
Nancy Bucca 02/24/12
I liked this very much. Good dramatic build up with an excellent message at the end.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 02/25/12
I really enjoyed this. I've been on retreats where I've been on Faith walks. How true that life is one big faith walk!

You switched POV from the first person in the beginning to the third near the end.

Thgis is spot on for topic and all the while demonstrating a lovely message. You did a brilliant job with this piece.
Theresa Santy 02/25/12
Clever, insightful, and creative.

Loved it.
Hiram Claudio02/28/12
This was a very creatively crafted story. I enjoyed the "aha" moment about half way through when I realized who it was that was leading the MC. Very well done with a wonderful messagea at the end.
Leola Ogle 02/29/12
Loved this, especially the part where Jesus said "I can't tell you or you may try to get there on your own." Isn't that so like us humans? Well written! Good job! God bless!
Hiram Claudio03/01/12
Congratulations on finishing 3rd in this challenge! Well done.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 03/01/12
Congratulations this was one of my favorites
CD Swanson 03/01/12
Congratulations on your ribbon. This was a fine story. Well done.

God Bless~
Nancy Bucca 03/01/12
Congratulations on your placement. Great job!