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02/23/12
Oh my goodness! This was so gripping...It was moving and just excellent. I am crying over here. Just a brilliant entry with a beautiful message wrapped up in it.

If this is a true story - my deepest condolences for your siginificant loss.

God Bless~
This is a heart-wrenching tale that comes true far too often. I can't imagine losing a child. You did a nice job of pulling me in and relating to the MC.

The transition from his waving goodbye to a banging at the door was sudden. I found myself rereading to see if I missed something.

The message you gave is a powerful one. I wrote a poem once called On Loan. It's about how kids aren't a gift to us but more of a loan. In that poem when we return the child to God, He answers that He too knows that pain. And He does. God had Jesus come to earth as aq human so we would know that He knows what it is like. You did a wonderful job demonstrating that.
02/28/12
Words cannot describe how much I admire you for sharing so openly such a painful time in your life. The profound and powerful wisdom that you communicate truly gives hope and life to the reader. This is SO well written. I too extend my sympathy for your loss and my appreciation for your son's service to our country.
02/28/12
Such a sad but touching story! I had a grandson and his wife BOTH in Afghanistan at the same time, one in Bagram and one in Herat, leaving their small babies with us in the states. So this story really hit home for me. Thanks for sharing. God bless!