The Official Writing Challenge
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I like this.

I'd have given a translation of the first French phrase you used, even if it was just an asterisk with a note at the bottom. I was able to use context clues to figure out it was probably something about "the car exhaust fumes," but it broke the flow for me, as I tried to figure it out.

I loved the ending.

I loved this entire story. It was sweet and very believable. I liked your "French" intermingled within the created the proper atmosphere to complete your story. Nicely done.

God Bless~
I think this is beautiful Beth - so tender and gentle with such 'real' descriptions, as always. Just lovely to read.
Congratulations for ranking 11th in level 4 and 15th overall!