The Official Writing Challenge
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02/16/12
Beautiful and poignant entry. I truly enjoyed this, and felt strong emotions during my whole time reading it. Great job.
God Bless~
Oh this was so good. I felt myself holding my breath, afraid of being heard. This was outstanding from beginning to end.
02/17/12
Very evocative treatment of a shameful era. Well written.
Golden words from a hay and stubble time not quite gone by. The story flowed and held me as I also held my breath. If you develop it further you might want help with just a bit of fine tuning on the speech patterns, though it does read well.
02/17/12
This reminds me of the movie Amastad where the slave, who knew no English, boldly shouted in court "Give us free!" - in the only words he could. It made me cry, and your story was as profound and poignant. God bless!
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