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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Astonishment (02/02/12)

TITLE: Wonderful Words
By Wilma Schlegel


So what’s this guy’s story? He’s so quiet, is he dumb or something? I don’t think so, in fact I thought he was...but no, I guess that’s not very likely. So, how is he doing it?

I’ll tell you what. I’m no pansy, but getting that leather whip across my back, that hurt like heck! And he got flesh chunked out of his back when they beat him! But they say he didn’t yell. I yelled, believe me. I spit at them, too. I’d do it again if there was any spit left in my mouth.

Look at them down there. Oh, ow, never mind. It hurts too much to move, to even look. It’s getting so hard to breath. If I only had the strength of that guy in the middle.

Doesn’t he know? This is it. There’s nothing left. It doesn’t matter now. Nothing matters. He doesn’t have to keep up the act.

“Hey Zech!” the thick unbreathable air carried the voice of the man from the farthest cross to Zech’s ears. Zech wanted to hear. He wanted a connection to life, any life, but he had no strength for the effort to listen.

“Zech,” Mal’s voice struggled on. “Can you believe this loser? Isn’t he supposed to be the ‘savior of the world’?” After mustering more strength Mal continued. “What world’s he going to save? The underworld? That’s where we’re headed now. Ha, Ha, Ha!” Another pause for strength and Mal continued again. “It hurts so good to laugh, Ha Ha.” Then looking at the man in the middle he mocked, “You idiot, I wish I could spit.”

Zech’s head swam with weakness and pain. Something wasn’t right in all this. “Mal, stop. Have you no fear of God? We deserve this, but he does not.”

As miraculously happens in the fleeting moments before death, Zech saw the events of his life pass by. He was granted an instant of brilliant clarity and he became afraid. He saw Mal in a whole new way. Strong Mal; clever Mal; catch-me-if-you-can Mal; now caught. Caught and suffering like an animal in a trap. Still fighting - fighting for what?

Heaven help me! I’ve been a fool. I’m so sorry for the life I’ve lived. Now it’s over and it’s too late. What is left for me? The dark, putrid mouth of death devours me. I’m so... afraid.

“JESUS!” Zech cried out. If only I could touch you, he thought. I wish you could help me, but why should you? I’m a rotten, filthy sinner. “Remember me when you come into your kingdom!”

He closed his eyes and gave up. And for the second time that day, drops of blood were sweated.

But wait, was he completely delirious? Or, did he hear the most astonishingly wonderful words ever spoken to him?

“I tell you the truth, today you will be with me in paradise.”


Bible verses: Luke 23:42,43 NIV

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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 02/09/12
You really brought these verses to life. Your dialog and thoughts felt so real. Though I have read several stories of the crucifixion this week, you approached it from a different angle. Nicely done.
harvestgal Ndaguba02/09/12
Wow, I agree, you did bring these Scriptures to life. I loved the way you took us for a journey into this man's last thoughts. I loved the wonderful words ending too.
C D Swanson 02/10/12
Beautiful job - such a good entry. I love stories of the Bible in entries, always enjoy them-and this was no different. Great job.
God Bless~
Hiram Claudio02/13/12
This was so good! I love the retelling of known bible stories from a different vantage point or with a twist. It really does bring it to life and make it more revelent. Very nice job!
Helen Curtis02/14/12
I really like this perspective, you did a great job. What a sense of relief Zach would have felt at those words! Well done.
Linda Goergen02/16/12
Truly those would be the most astonishing words Zech would ever hear… like the most astonishing words every Christian hopes to hear on Judgment Day: "Well done, good and faithful servant!" I enjoyed this read!
Donna Wilcher02/18/12
Oh..this gave me goosebumps! Great re-tell of one the most wonderful stories in the Bible.

Really like this! Alot!