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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Astonishment (02/02/12)

TITLE: Checking Dangers
By Kelvin Fowler
02/08/12


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Minus twenty-two degrees
too cold for buses to the market
road ungraded, packed snow, sheet ice
drive we will.

First traffic lights out
we pause, checking dangers
all is clear, we accelerate.

A sudden noise
metal upon metal
an astonished look
as we fly within our seat belts
whilst being shunted down the road.

Adrenalin kicks in
we exit the car feeling instantly cold
assess our damage, not good
young man in black BMW
starts speaking at me in Russian.

Insurance issues
we call the police
they don't want to come
I beg, we can't afford problems
police reluctantly come.

Cold feet, cold fingers
salvaging debris
filling out forms
drive to the market.

Monday morn
minus thirty night
battery dead
neighbour helps
drive to insurance office.

Old car, family life blood
needs new door
and new bumper
valued more than the car
car is written off.

Astonished, shocked and shaken
Saturday buying veggies for church lunch
rear-ended, whip-lashed
Monday morn impossibly car-less
with now no means of replacing.

Update. I am presently waiting for the broken parts of my car to arrive. It should go into the shop next week. Please pray that they do not write it off, pray that it is repaired, doesn't cost me anything and that it will be ready before we leave for furlough.


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Catherine Maher02/11/12
All I can feel is the cold metal. Truly chilling. Well done and I will pray that it works out as you desire. Sounds like it was more than just a "bump in the road."
CD Swanson 02/12/12
I am glad you weren't "severely hurt." Praise God. Will keep you in prayer. Good job with this--different and sweeping saga. God Bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 02/12/12
I enjoyed this and definitely is a unique take on the topic. I just said a prayer for you.
Allison Egley 02/13/12
Oh, nice job with this one.

To me, this was just a bit weak on topic. But that could just be me. :)

You captured the anxiety and feelings well.
Karlene Jacobsen 02/15/12
Isn't it interesting that the frigid temps coincided with the troubles mounting? Good writing.
Linda Goergen02/16/12
Just reading about those temps made me shiver, without having to be out in it. And then an accident...another shiver. I don’t quite understand why you even went out in those temps—it must have been important and thank God you are okay. It is astonishing how a day can change everything. I will certainly be praying for you!