The Official Writing Challenge
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You had me wanting more, which is a good thing! I found myself asking questions and reading on to find the answers.

You may want shorter paragraphs and to double space in between to give the reader that all important white space.

The ending was great! I didn't see it coming at all. I chuckled aloud. I enjoyed the twist and can say it is so true:)
02/09/12
Ha! I absolutely love this application of 'Astonishment.' I can relate!

Couple of notes: The first sentence, "When I first began to get to know her.." is quite passive. Perhaps something like, "In the beginning..." would jumpstart a piece with more energy? Also, some qualifying words such as: really, only, very, and quite--though they seem to add oomph--tend to deflate the nouns that follow. For example, in my notes above, if I take out the word 'quite,' the sentence is less hessitant, and therefore stronger.

But again, I thought this was a wonderfully creative, fresh, and unique approach to the word "Astonishment."
02/10/12
Such a great story. I really enjoyed the journey you took me on and the way it concluded with the only hope any of us have rests in the Lord alone.

Wonderful written!
02/10/12
Nicely done. Just a beautiful story!
God bless~
02/10/12
Nicely done. Just a beautiful story!
God bless~
02/16/12
Congratulations! God Bless~
02/16/12
Congrats Rosamund! Good job! God bless!