The Official Writing Challenge
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This caught my interest right away. Your descriptions of characters are true to some I knew in high school.
02/10/12
This was powerful. I felt myself saying, "Don't go Hannah!" Unfortunately, this very accurately describes what happens far too often and how a young woman's unloved heart can be fulnerable to vultures. Excellent job!
02/12/12
A very deep and profound entry. I felt as if I was standing there watching the "unhappy friend" - we have all known or know someone like that. Outward appearances so often belie the "inner" person.

Good job - excellent writing.
God Bless you~
Wow this is powerful. My heart ached as I wanted to scream, "Don't go!" This should be required reading for every parent, especially fathers.
Is this a guy friend or a girl friend?I feel different about the story if a guy is telling it.
02/15/12
So sad how the unloved can be so hungry for love, they will accept counterfeit versions of it.
Like the MC, I found myself praying for the miracle that Hannah would come back with her innocence intact. This was such well written story. Emotion evoking! Great job.
Congratulations for ranking 10th in level 4 and 11th overall!