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02/03/12
Oh I really liked this story...It was so good. It held my attention throughout the entire story. I kind of felt the bartender might have been an "angel" or someone from heaven.

Wonderful message and great job! God Bless you~
Too bad there isn't an angel in every bar. Cute story. I noticed a few spots where the paragraphs are messed up--one person's action in the same line as another person's dialogue. Enjoyed the story!
02/08/12
Interesting! I liked the development of the characters and plot. Well done.
02/08/12
I liked this story - I really felt for your poor MC. I figured out "Mike" was an angel early on, but I still enjoyed it. A couple of things - he said he doesn't "drown his sorrows" often, but later says he normally wouldn't be caught dead drinking tea in a bar. Kinda contradicting. And I'm not sure the "epilog" helps - yes, we did guess the rest of the story. Good job covering the topic!