The Official Writing Challenge
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Wow - this was a powerful entry. I felt as if I was witnessing this entire story before my eyes...Your depiction of the MC feeling demoralized by the questioning, and assessment of the Department, made me feel sad, and I cringed.

WOnderful piece of writing.
Thank you for this.
God Bless~
Oh wow! This is so sad and touching, but written exceptionally well. The haltering rhythm portrays the stuttering words of the disabled person. Well done!
I love this. I like how you make the case so convincingly (peal back skin and scalp...) yet acknowledge the problem (the slothful idlers...that milk the system). Your poem is wonderful. I especially like the ending, how it ties in with the start and is really the heart of the MC's situation. Well done.
This speaks for all those that need help and want to retain their dignity too. Great job at painting a realistic picture of the MC's feelings and struggles with a system that fails many. Highly commended--absolutely!
Congrats. God Bless~