The Official Writing Challenge
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02/02/12
Nicely done...Good message and well written.
God Bless~
02/02/12
A very nice piece and a great message for us all. Nicely done.
02/02/12
Two entries in a row on trust. Hmmmm....God must surely be speaking to some of us. LOL Thanks for sharing this wonderful story. God bless!
02/08/12
Great message, nicely written.

The first sentence sticks out in my mind. "He stood with anger in his eyes." And I wonder, what would a person look like if they had anger in their eyes? The only reason this question comes to me is that I've been listening to all the writing advice-givers talk about how it's better to show an emotion than to say the word for it.

Anyway, I enjoyed the flow of the message, seamless from beginning to end.
Congratulations for ranking 6th in level 3!