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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Agreement/Disagreement (01/19/12)

TITLE: The Flames Never Die
By Jesus Puppy
01/25/12


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Mark could feel his young wife behind him, reading his latest attempt at writing. A squeak sounded from his old desk chair as she leaned across the back of the seat. Doing her normal 'edit-of-his-thoughts' on the matter of plot choice, she began to read out loud.

"'The thin silk robe fell from Carol's shoulder as she slid into her husband's warm embrace.' Are you kidding?" Reading a moment more she began to laugh. "This is a story about an old couple."

"Yeah. They're celebrating their 50th anniversary." He turned in his chair to watch her eyes as she read over the rest. "It's this month's piece for AARP. I'm calling it,'The Flames Never Die'. What do you think?"

"These two are in their 70's."

"The man is 76, like my grandpa.” He reached out an arm and pulled Jill into his lap, smiling. “They‘re the ones that inspired me on this one.”

“They are really nice, but...” she slowly raised her hand to brush the hair from Mark’s face. “They can be so embarrassing, They are always hugging on each other. And when they stop in a doorway to kiss, it's ridiculous.”

“I beg to differ there.” Mark pulled her closer in a hug of their own. “I happen to think it’s cool that they still love each other at their age.”

Jill giggled like a child as she snuggled into her husband’s chest, resting her head just beneath his chin.

“Do you think we will still be that way when we reach our 70's?”

“I am counting on it,” he said, kissing the top of Jill’s head softly. "Like I wrote in our wedding vows... “Til death and beyond, through the Lord’s eternity in paradise, I will hold you always, in my arms and my heart.”

“Awww. My husband, the romantic.”

“Yep,” Mark hugged her again as she looked up in his eyes. “I take after my grandpa in that.”


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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 01/26/12
I just love this. You covered the topic fully but in a great subtle way. I think it is fresh and clever. My kids groan about the thought of their grandparents kissing and what not but I think it is sweet. That's what love is all about. Great job with this inspirational piece.
Camille (C D) Swanson 01/26/12
Beautiful and so sweet. I really liked this piece, and I thought of my own late beloved grandparents. They would kiss and hold hands, and go off into their own world, in full view of 11 grandchildren, and their 7 children. We felt their true soul mate love.

Nicely done - God Bless~
Amy Michelle Wiley 01/27/12
Awww, cute. Clever way of writing it about writing and yet about their life, too.
Helen Curtis01/28/12
How sweet! I honestly hope that I am this much in love with my husband when we're 70! Well done.
AnneRene' Capp 01/28/12
This story crooned me right into the arms of envious daydreaming at having such tneder-loving husbands as these two men. Thanks for the "moment". :)
Hiram Claudio01/28/12
This is a wonderful piece and a great use of the topic. I enjoyed the interaction between the two main characters, disagreeing initially but doing so while in each others arms. A subtle but moving context. Very well done!
Leola Ogle 01/28/12
Sweet, sweet, sweet...both couples! Loved it! Good job! God bless!
Noel Mitaxa 01/29/12
Clever how you have combined the topic with some "personal outreach." A good fun read.
Judy Sauer 02/01/12
An endearing story ... makes me think of my elderly aunt before her hubby of 63 years passed away.

Your story kept me interested from beginning to end. Keep up the great work.
annie keys02/02/12
Good job! Congratulations! Write on----
AnneRene' Capp 02/02/12
Way to go buddy! This deserved to place!! Congratulations!!!
Hiram Claudio02/02/12
A wonderful piece and deserving of the recognition ... congratulations!
Camille (C D) Swanson 02/02/12
congratulations on your HR! Nice job - and well deserved. God Bless~
Camille (C D) Swanson 02/02/12
Awww...I loved this entry. I am so glad you received a recognition. It was so well deserved! God Bless you~
Kathleen Langridge02/02/12
Subtle, enveloping, warm and real. Superbly, crafted from the heart.