The Official Writing Challenge
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This is certainly creative.

I don't know if you meant it to come across this way or not, but it could be read that all doctors are bad, and that Christians should not use modern medicine... I hope this is more of an allegory. That I can live with. :)

I loved all the names and the alliteration.
This is very creative. The story was full of amazing descriptions; my only comment would be that perhaps it was a bit too cryptic? I found it a little bit hard to follow, although I did get that the baddie was lead to the Lord by the goodie! And that's the most important thing of all. Well done.