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01/12/12
Excellent in every way. Great job showing the MC's inner turmoil and turning point. Very good storytelling!
01/12/12
You made my heart ache with the torment of her temptation! The character handled the temptation through the overcoming power of Christ; a good lesson in how to handle such things.

The character 'lived' in the reading. Good job--I felt her conflict and rejoiced in her choice!
01/12/12
The loving devotion of your characters made me think of my aunt, now 88 years old. Married after 4 months of dating. Was told it would never last. 63 years later, still madly in love, my uncle went to Heaven.

I wasn't expecting the story to lead to a near catastrophic choice. Thank God your character saw the invisible shield that protected the integrity of her committment. Your wording is quite good.
01/13/12
Fantastic job. The commitment was clearly stated, and the story was enjoyable. Nicely done.

God Bless~
01/18/12
Whew! This one had me holding my breath until the very end, hoping for a happy ending. So glad Ellie made the right choice. Good job! God bless!
I really enjoyed this gripping tale. Loneliness can cause havoc on a heart. You did a great job with the topic. Small red ink wain is a truck often found on a farm. I think you wanted the verb wane. :)
Congratulations for ranking 9th in level 3!